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Cherry blossom or Dandelion Confrontation so disturbed Japanese that they would oftentimes take the complaisant path rather than risk antagonizing anyone else and this looks like a subdued cherry blossom (Sakura). Few people as intrepid as Takafumi Horie would have attempted a business challenge so many before he had failed and been bankrupted. In some cases, though abstruse and inarticulate strategies are proposed, his vision is always logical and laconic. Everyone was surprised at his audacity and incessant hubbubs. His venture company tried to bail out and TOB one of the biggest companies, Livedoor and it succeeded. Even after earning billions, his desire for more wealth proved insatiable so he is assiduous in merging more companies and engrossed in renovating razed companies. These his works were so salutary to the employment rate and economy in Japan that it disseminate an effervescent atmosphere to Japanese venture companies. However, he was indicted on swindling charges because he made his fortune with a fraudulent scheme. His reputation incrementally debased and he was arrested. These bring to my mind that cherry blossoms are treasured by the Japanese as much for their beauty as for their ephemeral nature. In some years, he came back from the jail and is resurgent. He is a dandelion rather than a cherry blossom. He started to run a new rocket business and will burgeon against the odds soon.

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Cherry blossom or Dandelion

Confrontation so disturbed the Japanese that they  oftentimes took the complacent* path rather than risk antagonizing others* and this looks like a subdued cherry blossom (Sakura). Few people as intrepid as Takafumi Horie would have attempted a business challenge so many before he had failed and been bankrupted. In some cases, though abstruse/obscure* and inarticulate strategies are proposed, his vision is always logical and laconic. Everyone was surprised at his audacity and incessant hubbubs. ?* His venture company tried to bail out and TOB one of the biggest companies, Livedoor and it succeeded. Even after earning billions, his desire for more wealth proved insatiable so he is assiduous in merging more companies and engrossed in renovating razed companies. His* works were so salutary to the employment rate and economy in Japan that it disseminate an effervescent atmosphere to Japanese venture companies. However, he was indicted on swindling charges because he made his fortune with a fraudulent scheme. His reputation incrementally debased and he was arrested. This brings to my mind that cherry blossoms are treasured by the Japanese as much for their beauty as for their ephemeral nature. In some years, when he *came back from the jail, he resurrected himself*. To me, *He is a dandelion rather than a cherry blossom. He started to run a new rocket business and will burgeon against the odds soon.


*** A good piece. But please watch the tenses and sentence structure. Sometimes bombastic words backfire. Simplicity is preferable. 

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Cherry blossom or Dandelion

Confrontation so disturbed the Japanese that they would oftentimes take the complaisant path, rather than risk antagonizing anyone else, and this looks like a subdued cherry blossom (Sakura). Few people are as intrepid as Takafumi Horie, who would have attempted a business challenge that so many before he him had failed and been gone bankrupted. In some cases, though abstruse and inarticulate strategies are proposed, his vision is always logical and laconic. Everyone was surprised at his audacity and incessant hubbubs. His venture company tried to bail out and TOB one of the biggest companies, Livedoor, and it succeeded. Even after earning billions, his desire for more wealth proved insatiable, so he is was assiduous in merging more companies and engrossed in renovating razed companies. These His works were so salutary to the employment rate and economy in Japan that it disseminated an effervescent atmosphere to Japanese venture companies. However, he was indicted on swindling charges because he made his fortune with a fraudulent scheme. His reputation incrementally was debased and he was arrested. These This brings to my mind that cherry blossoms are treasured by the Japanese as much for their beauty as for their ephemeral nature. In some years, he came back from the/got out of jail and is resurgent. He is a dandelion rather than a cherry blossom. He started to run a new rocket business and will burgeon against the odds soon.

 

This was very well written. I hope I caught all the errors, but they were so small I'm not really sure... Overall, this was excellent.  

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