native english speakers, help me please :)

Could you please show me my mistakes? :)

If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.

I live in Yekaterinburg; i. It is the a large industrial city on the board border between Europe and Asia, with a large amount of opportunities and different kinds of entertainment. However, there are not no big musical festivals. In my opinion, the government of my city should think about a new amazing tradition- summer musical festivals, which can bring happiness for the people and money for the budget.

First of all, the organization of musical festivals is extremely actual event ???. In fact, a lot of Russian festivals` organizers want to find a permanent place for them. For example, «Kubana» is the most popular Russian rock-festival, which was based on the Black sea beaches, and they cannot find a place for it nowadays. It was decided to hold the festival in a village in the Iantarnii, Kaliningradskaia region in august 2015, h. However, the minister of Kaliningrad canceled it inspite in spite of musicians` readiness and the enormous numbers of sold tickets. I mention that we do not need to establish new festivals, or spend time and money for their popularization; all we need to do is choosing choose what present musical festivals we want to hold.

Secondly, musical festivals help to increase city`s budget. Indeed, festivals will attract new tourists, who will spend money in Yekaterinburg for buying tickets, food, accommodations, souvenirs and so on. For instance, the cheapest ticket to «Kubana» costs 9000 rubles, and this festival can hold nearly 10 000 people. As a result, the budget will get approximately 90 000 000 rubles just for one festivals without all of the performances and guardian costs. I think this amount of money is an important reason.

Lastly, Yekaterinburg should hold more events for the townspeople. My city has about 1 500 000 people, who want new performances, shows, festivals and cultural events. I know that mostly part of most (many) of the Yekaterinburg people go to different cities or even countries for interesting vacation spending. I think it is a good idea to create such a place for holidays in Yekaterinburg for people interested in music.

In conclusion, I strongly believe that holding musical festivals in Yekaterinburg is a really important thing. I think that these festivals can invite townspeople` and tourists' attention to my city, and, in addition, increase the budget for holding new events in the future.

native english speakers, help me please :)
Could you please show me my mistakes? :)

If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.

I live in Yekaterinburg,it is the a large industrial city located just at the border between Europe and Asia. with Our city offers a large amount of opportunities and different kinds of entertainment. However, there are not no big Musical festival. In my opinion, the Government of in my our city should think about new amazing tradition (much better if you say attraction instead of tradition) like summer music festival, which can bring happiness for to the people and provide a source of income to increase  money for the our city budget.

First of all, organization organizing of a Musical festival is extremely (actual)???? event. In fact, a lot of Russian festivals organizers wanted to find a permanent place for them. For example, "Kubana" which is the most popular Russian Rock-festival, which was based on which is usually held at the Black Sea beach is not available cannot find place for it nowadays. Therefore,it was has been decided to hold the festival in the Village of Iantarnii, Kaliningradskaia region in August 2015. Unluckily, the Minister of Kaliningrad cancelled it the festival in spite of the readiness of the musicians and the enormous numbers of sold tickets. I have mentioned that we do not need to establish new festivals, spend time and money for their popularization; all we need to do is to choose what kind of present musical festivals we want to hold.

Secondly, Music festivals help to increase the city's budget. Indeed, this will attract new more tourist, who will spend money in Yekaterinburg for to rent for accommodations, buy tickets,foods, souvenirs and so on. For instance, the cheapest ticket to "Kubana" costs 9000 rubles and this festival can hold up to nearly 10 000 people. As a result, the budget will get reach to approximately 90 000 000 rubles in just for one festivals not including the cost for the performance and for security maintenance(guardian-does this pertain to security guards?). I think this amount of money is an important reason aspect to consider.

Lastly, Yekaterinburg should hold more events for the townspeople. My city has a population of about 1 500 000 people, who wanted to have a new performances, shows, festivals and cultural events. I know that mostly part most people from our townof Yekaterinburg people go to different cities or even countries for to spend an interesting vacation spending. I think it is a good idea to create such place for holidays in Yekaterinburg for the people who are interested in music.

In conclusion, I strongly believed that holding musical festivals in Yekaterinburg is a really important thing. I think that these festivals can invite more townspeople not only in our place but  and also from other places.tourists' attention to my city and, Thereby increasing the budget for to holding organize new events in the future.