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Hallo! Ich heiße Brian Bartelt. Ich bin Amerikaner, und ich komme aus Wisconsin. Ich bin ein (1) Notrufnummer Dispatcher/Operator/Mitarbeiter in einer Notrufzentrale und ein Feuerwehrmann. Ich studierte Gesetzesvollstreckung/Strafverfolgung in der (2) Universität. Ich mag angeln gehen, Bücher lesen, und Brettspiele spielen. Ich studiere/lerne (3) Deutsch, weil ich mag Deutsch und die Kulture mag (4). Ich will Deutch mit meiner Familie sprechen.
Introduktion auf deutsch
Hallo! Ich heisse Brian Bartelt. Ich bin Amerikaner, und ich komme aus Wisconsin. Ich bin ein (1) Notrufnummer Dispatcher und ein Feuerwehrmann. Ich studierte Gesetzesvollstreckung/Strafverfolgung in der (2) Universität. Ich mag angeln gehen, Bücher lesen, und Brettspiele spielen. Ich studiere/lerne (3) Deutsch, weil ich mag Deutsch und die Kulture mag (4). Ich will Deutsch mit meiner (5) Familie sprechen.
Willkommen bei italki, Brian!
Excellent composition, just a couple of problems that are common for beginners.
1. You don't need an article (ein or der/die/das) before nationalities (you did this correctly with "Ich bin Amerikaner"), religions "Ich bin Muslim" or occupations, "Ich bin Lehrer."
2. "Universität" is a feminine noun. There are some prepositions, in, an, über, unter, neben, zwischen, auf and more that require that the noun that comes after them be in the dative case if the prespotions describes the location of one noun in relation to another. Since your location was "in the university" while you were studying, you'll use the dative case. Since Universität is a feminine noun, your determiners (mein-, jed-, dies–, der/die/das, ihr-, welch-) has to take an -er ending.
3. studieren=to major in. If you are studying your math homework or a foreign langauge by yourself or with a tutor, then you "lernst" that language. You "studiertest Strafverfolgung" but you are "lern-ing Deutsch."
4. "weil" is a subordninating conjunction, you can find a list of subordinating conjunctions here: http://german.about.com/library/weekly/aa010910b.htm. These are also called "verb kickers" because they send the finite (conjugated) verb to the end of the sentence.
5. "mit" is a dative prepositons, which means that all nouns and pronouns that come after it have to be declined or inflected for the dative case. For nouns, you'll change the determiner, in the case, "mein-" to show that "Familie" is in the dative case. Feminine nouns in the dative take an -er on their determiners.
Also, remember to capitalize all nouns and only nouns. Some words like "German" which are always capitalized in English are only capitalized in German if they're a noun, like "Ich spreche Deutsch." or "Deutsche sind fleißig." But "Ich kann die deutsche Sprache." and "Das deutsche Volk ist sehr fleißig."
Hope this helps. Let me know if you need a better clarification.
Regards,
Elliot
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