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This actual moment is the only thing I really possess and nothing else! As said in the title, you've got nothing except this actual moment...That's the only thing you really do have...There was moments which passed and there will be moments coming after...But, the truth is that they are not yours ! Right now, am living my moment, I am trying to live it better as I can, I keep smiling :) , I keep hoping, I keep dreaming, I keep wishing all the best...No limits. The right now moment is the past of the next moment...is that right? At least, for me, yes, it is...I've ever looked back and I will never do that...I learnt a lot from my past moments, but am not living them anymore...I can't be sad all the time because of sins, errors, fails I commited or lived before..I wanna a better nice "Next moment"...I have to live my "Present moment" so insanly better as I can... If now, you're sad..Dont be...If any you're feeling bad...Don't be...If any you're losing hope...Don't be! Yourself needs you right now...Listen to that voice...live simply as you can, you're not like none...Live your own style...Never try to imitate somebody...You're unique, you're the best ! Dear "Right moment", I am really happy I do have you, and I am really happy that you belong to me and only to me...I won't betray you, I am gonna be generous with you...You'll be the happiest moment ever in my life...Because, I am living you as you're the (my) last moment in my life and I am wondering to die smiling :) With Peace & Love...Abdou :)

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This actual moment is the only thing I really possess and nothing else!

As said in the title, you've got nothing except this actual moment.That's the only thing you really do have.(1)There were moments which have passed and there will be moments coming after, but the truth is that they are not yours !

Right now, I am living my moment. I am trying to live it as best as I can. I keep smiling :) , I keep hoping, I keep dreaming, I keep wishing all the best, with no limits.

The moment right now is the past of the next moment, isn't that right? (OR you can simply say ",right?" For me, yes, it is. I've never looked back and I will never do that again. I learned a lot from my past moments, but am not living them anymore. I can't be sad all the time because of sins, errors, failures I commited or lived before. I wanna  (2) better nice "Next moment". I have to live my "Present moment" so insanly better as I can.(3)

If now, you're sad, dont be. If any you're feeling bad, don't be. If any you're losing hope, don't be! Yourself needs you right now. Listen to that voice. Live as simply as you can. You're not like none any one else. Live your own style. Never try to imitate anyone. You're unique, you're the best !

Dear "Right moment", I am really happy I do have you, and I am really happy that you belong to me and only to me. I won't betray you. I am gonna be generous with you. You'll be the happiest moment ever in my life. Because I am living you as if you're the (my) last moment in my life and I am wondering left to die smiling :)

With Peace & Love...Abdou :)

 

1. Ellipsis - You have LOTS of ellipsi and  they are not being used properly. Normally used when words have been left out of a sentence, or, as in this text, I think you would use them if you had an unfinished thought or a pause while you are speaking. However, I see all these sentences as completed thoughts. I know it seems like a silly thing to bring up, but it does make your text less confident and very hard to read, which makes this an important comment because your thoughts are confident and clearly expressed!

 

2. ...wanna - VERY colloquial, primarily to the US. You can use it, just know it's not correct english. If you do choose to use it, understand what it means. wanna = want a. When we say want a real fast, it sounds like wanna, so you do not need the second "a" after wanna - it's already suggested in the word. Same with gonna = going to.

 

3. ...so insanly better as I can... o.k. Americans use LOTS of adjectives one after the other. Here if you use "so" you would say something like "...so insanely better than before. OR ...AS insanely better as possible. Note that these sentences are not really grammatically correct - however, you are expressing something where the words are playing out your feelings - right? So creative verbage totally rocks here.

 

Great job!

 

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