Writing task 1
According the graph,obviously,the proportion of the population age 65 and over is like a ramp and keeping climbing from 1940 to 2040. In 2040, the three countries's proportions are all higher than before, the proportion of Sweden and USA is gradually rising from 1940 to 2040,but Japan is totally different with that.
In 1940, Japnese population aged 65 and over is 5%, and it lower tha Sweden and USA. However, the proportion of Japan didn't rise over the time. It's getting down until 1960 and come back to 5% in 2008. The lowest is around 3% in the period. With the overview, Japanese population aged 65 and over seemingly lose with Sweden and USA. But after 2030, the the sitiuation is quite changeable,it climbing fast and higher than Sweden and USA in the end.
Through comparing the three countries with the graph, the result of the proportion is probably showing Japanese elder people's heath caring is getting a big progress from 2008 to 2040.
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Writing task 1
According to the graph, obviously, the proportion of the population age 65 and over is like a ramp and keeps climbing from 1940 to 2040. In 2040, the three countries' proportions are all higher than before, the proportion of Sweden and USA is gradually rising from 1940 to 2040, but Japan is totally different from that.
In 1940, Japanese population aged 65 and over was 5%, lower than Sweden and the USA. However, the proportion of Japan didn't rise over the time. It fell until 1960 and returned back to 5% in 2008. The lowest is around 3% in the period. With the overview, Japanese population aged 65 and over is seemingly less than Sweden and USA. But after 2030, the the situation is quite changeable, it climbs fast and higher than Sweden and USA in the end.
Through comparing the three countries with the graph, the result of the proportion is probably showing Japanese elder people's heath care is making big progress from 2008 to 2040.
Hello Ching-ting Su,
The word level is about right for this part of the writing but I don't think the graph is well described. Did you make a plan for this? The first paragraph is ok as it gives an overview of the graph. But in the second paragraph you should break it into sections. I would run a comparison between the USA and Sweden and treat Japan as a separate item until 2030.
Which level are you aiming for on IELTS?
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