Could anybody correct it please? Thanks!

A report on improvements in one of the areas at school

Introduction
The aim of this report is to outline the main improvements which should be made to facilitate student life. The cafeteria is one of the meeting points for students. However, it could be improved by giving people more comfort and availability in break hours.

Benefits
Firstly, the cafeteria offers a wide range of meals on the menu where people can choose between local and international dishes which is very important for foreign students. Moreover, the cafeteria's furniture has a colourful style designed by students who helped out with this idea.

Disadvantages
On the other hand, the cafeteria is always crowded therefore it should be extended in order to give people more seats and to avoid them having to rush their meals. In addition, the cafeteria should have a team more available and motivated as sometimes they are a bit impolite and as a consequence students end up going elsewhere.

Recommendations
I would recommend improving these two points in order to give a good and friendly service to everybody and remove these minor irritations.

Hello Pauline,

I hacve made corrections to your text, sometimes just a matter of style - for example in the recommendations  you use the expression 'get rid of'. This is fine in everyday language but not normally used in a formal context.

Hope this helps

Could anybody correct it please? Thanks!

A report on improvements in one of the areas at school

Introduction
The aim of this report is to outline the main improvements which should be made to improve the student areas. (student es adjectivo aquí)
The cafeteria is one of the meeting places for the students. However, it could be improved giving people more comfort and availability in break hours. improved by providing more comfortable chairs and keeping it open longer hours.

Benefits
Firstly, the cafeteria offers a range menu of meals where people can choose between local and international dishes which is very important for foreign students. Moreover, the cafeteria's furniture has a colorful style designed by students who helped out with this idea.

Disadvantages
On the other hand, the cafeteria is always crowed therefore hours should be extended in order to give people more seats and to avoid them having to eat meals quickly.
In addition, the cafeteria should have more workers who are also more motivated as sometimes they (the workers) are a bit impolite, and,  as consequence students end up with not coming.

Recommendations
I would recommend improving these two points in order to give a good and friendly service to everybody and get rid of these little problems.