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Final essay part 1 The Failure of Conscription “Every Korean serves duty of national defense.” (Chapter II article 39 of Constitution of the Republic of Korea) This seems right. However, this law has been justified the imprisonment of Korean men in army for 2 years. Every year, over 90% of Korean men have to serve this duty for 2 years. ("Result of an Examination for Conscription." Https://www.data.go.kr/. Military Manpower Administration, 2014. Web. 8 June 2015.) Because of its compulsiveness, compulsive military service made problems such as violence, waste of resource and money, lower morale. To stop these, changing current army system to voluntary army system is necessary. Its ‘compulsiveness’ makes young soldiers violent, wastes resource and money, makes demoralized soldiers. There are 3 reasons why we have to change current one to voluntary military service: less violence, less waste of resources, better soldiers. If a person has to be imprisoned for 2 years just because he is male, what will he feel? He will never be happy with the situation. Moreover, he’ll become aggressive. Philip George Zimbardo says “When people are imprisoned in certain place compulsively, they get stressed and act aggressively.” (Philip George Zimbardo, (2007). The Lucifer Effect: Understanding How Good People Turn Evil. New York: Random House. Page 48) In other words, once compulsive army system is exterminated, soldiers will not think they are imprisoned. Furthermore, they will not abuse privates. Just by changing into voluntary military service, the number of violence problem will become less. Therefore, changing conscription to voluntary military service is necessary.

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Final essay part 1

The Failure of Conscription
“Every Korean serves duty of national defense.” (Chapter II article 39 of Constitution of the Republic of Korea) This seems right. However, this law has justified the imprisonment of Korean men in the army for 2 years. Every year, over 90% of Korean men have to serve for 2 years. ("Result of an Examination for Conscription." Https://www.data.go.kr/. Military Manpower Administration, 2014. Web. 8 June 2015.) Because it is mandatory, compulsive military service made problems such as violence, wastes of resource and money, and lower morale. To stop these, Korea must change the current army system to a voluntary army system. Its ‘compulsiveness’ makes young soldiers violent, wastes resource and money, and demoralized soldiers. There are 3 reasons why we have to change the current one to voluntary military service: less violence, less waste of resources, better soldiers.

If a person has to be imprisoned for 2 years just because he is male, what will he feel? He will never be happy with the situation. Moreover, he’ll become aggressive. Philip George Zimbardo says, “When people are imprisoned in a certain place compulsively, they get stressed and act aggressively.” (Philip George Zimbardo, (2007). The Lucifer Effect: Understanding How Good People Turn Evil. New York: Random House. Page 48) In other words, once the compulsive army system is exterminated, soldiers will not think they are imprisoned. Furthermore, they will not abuse privates. Just by changing into voluntary military service, the number of violence problem will become less. Therefore, changing conscription to voluntary military service is necessary.

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