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There is no doubt that violent video games are becoming more and more popular. However, some games influence people’s behavior in a bad way and a person gets aggressive after playing these. Is it really so?
From my point of view, playing violent video games does affect human being’s behavior. First of all, people get used to be merciless with their rivals in the virtual world and afterwards they might behave in such a way with their family and relatives. Secondly, playing violent games contributes to degradation. People merely do not have time on reading books since they are indulged in thinking about games.
Nevertheless, there is an opinion that virtual games might develop self-confidence if a person wins all the time.
It may be true but I disagree with the idea above as I am convinced that through killing of virtual rivals people are able to be self-confident only in the virtual world, whereas in reality they still lack such a quality mentioned above. Furthermore, while playing these games, we lose our nerve cells because of the fear to not be a winner.
Taking everything into consideration, I would like to stress that it is harmful for people to play violent virtual games and relatives might suffer from ruthlessness of a person who is an avid video-gamer.
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I am sure that you can be sensitive and gentle person in everyday life and still play violent video games. Life is life, game is a game; time to unwind, relax and forget about that crazy world outside... Problems start when you can't see the difference between the two.
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Good work on your English. I can't fault your spelling or grammar. The topic is a very interesting and controversial one. I studied links between computer games and violence in Psychology at University and there is not as much evidence for it's harmful effect as you might think. In fact, some studies show that violence learned in video games is only weakly correlated with violence in the real world. Nowhere near as convincing as the correlation between childhood abuse and later violence, for example.
The argument for 'desensitization' (where people become numb to violence and therefore are not shocked when they see it occur) caused by long-term exposure to violent video games may be stronger. Common sense tells us that excessive exposure to violence of any kind is probably not a good thing. Still, it is important to research these questions and find real statistics to back up our claims, otherwise we are just relying on people's feelings and opinions.
Thank you for writing this essay! It was really interesting.
- Beaulah
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