Narrative story

Last year, I was spending a few days holiday with a friend of mine my mate in the Benasque valley, in the Pyrenees.
We had never been there before and it was fascinating watching the paragliders flying in the sky. For that this reason we decided to live this experience it ourselves in the time we were there during those days.

We went to ask the monitor supervisor when we could fly and surprisingly he said that if we wanted, we could do it at that moment.
So, we put on the appropiate attire and we took the all-terrain vehicle which had to take us to the takeoff area. While we were into the car, we felt very nervous but all the supervisors were explaining it using jokes and laughing and it turned out fun! a fanny way.

After a while, we reached a beautiful mountain. The views were amazing. Next, the supervisors made ready the paragliders ready and when they said the word I started to run towards and suddenly, my feet left the land, we had already took taken off.

Needless to say, it was an unforgettable day.

Great adventure and lovely piece of writing!

I changed "with my mate" to "with a freind of mine", you could also say "with a mate of mine", but in writing you'd probabaly use friend.  Mate is more often used by men in speech, when talking about their male friends, but women do use it too. 

"with my mate", sounds a little strange to me, it sounds like when an animal has a mate, I'd be interested in what other native speakers think of this.

Thanks

Rebecca

Narrative story

Last year, I was spending a few days holiday with my mate in the Benasque valley, in the Pyrenees.
We had never been there and it was fascinating watching the paragliders flying in the sky. For that reason we decided to live try this experience during those days.

We went to ask the monitor instructor when we could fly and surprisingly he said that if we wanted we could do it immediately.
So, we put on the appropiate attire and we got in the all-terrain vehicle ( 4 by 4 ) which had to take us to the takeoff area. While we were into the car, we felt very nervous but all the instructors were explaining telling jokes and laughing and it turned out a funny journey.

After a while, we reached a beautiful mountain. The views were amazing. Next, the instructors made  the paraglider  ready and when they said the word I started to run towards the edge and suddenly, my feet left the land, we had already taken off.

Needless to say, it was an unforgettable day.

Hello Rebecca,

It sound like it was unforgettable, I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Just a few small mistakes with the English. I think you mean 'instructors' not 'monitors' and the correct phrase is 'to tell a joke'.

Hope this helps