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Summary: Jamie Oliver's Address Yesterday I watched the video of Ted. This talk is Jamie Oliver who addressed “Techer every child about food”. How to choose food? what kinds of food we should eat? If people don't care about that they will becom overweight or obese. Diet-related disease is the biggest killer throughout the world. Lots of people have massive problems of obesity and bad health. We need a food revolution. Jamie has some examples about people was obese and died of obesity. He introduced most of the food largely processed and full of all sorts of additives, extra ingredients, it's not largely local and largely fresh now. Though they were eated everyday wherever you are at home or at school, it’s too much sugar and it's on obesity. Jamie addressed that all this bad news could be preventable. You're clever if you eat well and live longer.Whatever schools or supermarkets or the big brands, they should teach people food education. We also need to get the government to work with all of the fast food purveyors and the restaurant industry, get rid off the extreme amounts of fat, sugar and extra ingredients. At the same time, every family should teach their children knowing how to cook 10 recipes that will save their life. Every one of your individual efforts makes a difference, beautiful things will happen around the world. I must say I don’t have this kind of problem about obesity. We barely see very obese person in China. I think that because most of people cook at home and we always emphasize meat and vegetable both important. Every dishes will include fifty percent of vegetables and bean products, thirty percent of meats and the rest of rice or noodles. And most of adults seldom eat cakes or ice creams that kinds of sugar food could be caused obese. Nevertheless I agree Jamie’s theory, we should learn and keep healthy diet habit, it will help us a lot. I also dislike amounts of addictives or extra ingriedients, it seems attractive food but is unhealthy. Fresh and local food is good choice.

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Summary: Jamie Oliver's Address

Yesterday I watched the Ted video. This talk featured Jamie Oliver who addressed “Teach every child about food”. How to choose food? What kinds of food we should eat? If people don't care about that, they will become overweight or obese. Diet-related disease is the biggest killer throughout the world. Lots of people have massive problems with obesity and bad health. We need a food revolution.

Jamie had some examples about people who were obese and died of obesity. He introduced most of the food as largely being processed and full of all sorts of additives, extra ingredients: it's not largely local and largely fresh now. Since they are ate everyday whether you are at home or at school, it’s too much sugar and it's causing obesity.

Jamie addressed that all this bad news could be preventable. You're clever if you eat well and live longer. Whatever schools or supermarkets or the big brands make, they should teach people food education. We also need to get the government to work with all of the fast food purveyors and the restaurant industry to get rid of the extreme amounts of fat, sugar and extra ingredients. At the same time, every family should teach their children how to cook 10 recipes that will save their life. Every one of your individual efforts makes a difference, and beautiful things will happen around the world.

I must say we don’t have this kind of problem about obesity. We rarely see very obese person in China. I think that is because most people cook at home and we always emphasize meat and vegetables are both important. Every dish includes fifty percent of vegetables and bean products, thirty percent of meats and the rest of rice or noodles. And most adults seldom eat cakes or ice creams: the kinds of sugar food that could be causing obesity.Nevertheless, I agree with Jamie’s theory: we should learn and keep a healthy diet, it will help us a lot. I also dislike large amounts of additives or extra ingriedients, it seems attractive in food but is unhealthy. Fresh and local food is good choice.

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Overall I like the theme of this essay. There seems to be a lack of cohesion throughout because of the high number of syntactical mistakes. Many of the issues can be easily addressed and corrected.

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