my best present

Hi to all!

Last Saturday was great fun for me. My best friends prepared  a surprise hen party for me. When they came to my house I felt very nervous. Oh my God It was incredible! They bandaged my eyes blindfolded me and later they carried took me to a private party room by car. Here they dressed me up me as lamb, because my surname is Cordero. It was great but I was embarrassed because they carried me around the streets. There was a charanga band, good music and a lot of alcohol. The hen party finished at about 6 in the morning. The next day I felt tired and I had a headache but I was happy and gratefull because it was one the best surprises in my life. :)

Hello Sandrita,

It sound like you had a good time! Just a couple of mistakes.

1. The verb pattern is 'to take sb somewhere by + transport.

2. 'dress up' is a type 3 phrasal verb, so if you are using a  pronoun, (A word that replaces the thing.) it must go between the verb and the preposition (More about phrasals here https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2UVgTCILUbs )

3. You 'have a headache'

Good work!

my best present

Hi to all!
Last Saturday was very fun for me, my best friends prepared me a surprise hen party. When they came my house I felt very nervous. Oh my God. It is incredible! They blind folded me and later they took me by car to a private party room. Here they dressed up me as lamb, because my surname is Cordero. It was great but I was embarrased because they carried me around streets. There was a charanga band, good music, and a lot of alcohol. The hen party finished at about 6 in the morning. The next day, I felt tired and I had headache but I was happy and grateful because it was one the best surprises in my life. :)

my best present

Hi to all!
Last Saturday was very funny for me. My best friends prepared me a surprise hen party. When they come to my house I felt very nervous. Oh my God it was incredible! They bandaged my eyes and later they carried took/drove/transported me by car to a private party room. ['llevar por coche' does not translate like that.] 

Here they dressed me up as a lamb, because my surname is Cordero. It was great, but I was embarrased because they carried me around the streets. There was a charanga band, good music and a lot of alcohol. [Not too much I hope]

The hen party finished at about 6 in the morning. Next day I felt tired and I had headache but I was happy and gratefull because it was one the best surprises of my life. :)