Essay about friendship

my essays are so weak and dull, but I'm so sorry, I'll do my best. I've been learning English for almost a year, so please, be patient:) by the way, how can I make my essays be more interesting to read? maybe I should use some idioms? what would you add to this eassy? can you rewrite some sentences which seem to be childish to you?
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     There is no doubt that friendship cannot be replaced by other things as it is very important for each person. However, some people claim that the importance of friendship might be considered.

     I would like to express my judgement in this situation.(I'd say let this sentence go, just express your opinion and go straight to the point, don't announce it.) Personally, I believe that having friends is a necessity. First of all, friends are people who support us and we support in the toughest periods of our life. Therefore, the existence of friendship is very important if we want to overcome difficulties more easily.(This sentence should be at the end of the paragraph, it sounds like you are concluding. Before your second reason, add more details and elaborate more on your first reason) My second justification is that friends help us spend time having fun, building plans, and dream about the future life. It is a well-known fact that spending time with friends in these ways help reduce stress, forget about problems, and routine.

The opposing view believes that people are able to live wonderfully without any friends. Some suppose that friends might betray you and turn away when you need a shoulder to cry on. Consequently, people feel disappointed and do not want to make friends anymore.

I cannot fully agree with the opposing notion since true friends are checked up for ages (???) Inevitably, we'll eventually be able to see if this friend is true.

In conclusion, I would like to stress that the importance of friendship as it becomes apparent while bonds grow and continue to make us smile, laugh, and be in a joyous mood.

My Essay About Friendship

My essays are so weak and dull, but I'm not sorry because I'm doing my best. I've been learning English for almost a year now, so please, be patient:) By the way, how can I make my essays_more interesting to read? Maybe I should use some idioms? What would you add to this eassy? Can you rewrite some sentences which seem to be childish to you?
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There is no doubt that friendship cannot be replaced by other things as it is very important for everybody. However, some people claim that the importance of friendship might be reconsidered.

I would like to express my point of view on this situation. Personally, I believe that having friends is necessary for us. First of all, friends are people we can support and be supported by in the toughest periods of our life. Therefore, the existence of friendship is very important if we want to overcome difficulties more easily. The second reason is that friends help us spend time having fun, building plans and dreaming about the future. It is a well-known fact that spending time in such a way helps to reduce stress and forget about problems and escape routine.

There is an opposite opinion that people are able to live wonderfully without any friends. Some suppose that friends might betray you and turn away when you do need a shoulder to cry on. Consequently, people feel disappointed and do not want to make friends anymore.

I do not fully agree with the ideas above since people have found true friends for ages. Therefore, after a couple of mishaps along the way, we can see if a person is a real friend or not.

To sum up, I would like to stress that the importance of friendship is obvious as our friends are with us throughout the life making us smile, laugh and be always in a good mood. :)

Essay about friendship

my essays are so weak and dull, but I'm so sorry, I do my best. I've been learning English for almost a year, so please, be patient:) by the way, how can I make my essays be more interesting to read? maybe I should use some idioms? what would you add to this eassy? can you rewrite some sentences which seem to be childish to you?
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There is no doubt that friendship cannot be replaced by other things as it is very important for each person, However, some people claim that the importance of friendship might be considered.

I would like to express my point of view on this situation. Personally, I believe that having friends is necessary for us. First of all, friends are people we can support and be supported by in the toughest periods of our life. Therefore, the existence of friendship is very important if we want to overcome difficulties more easily. The second reason is that friends help us spend time having fun, building plans and dreaming about the our future life. It is a well-known fact that spending time by in such a way helps to reduce stress and forget about problems and routine.

There is an opposite opinion that people are able to live wonderfully without any friends. Some suppose that friends might betray you and turn away when you do need a shoulder to cry on. Consequently, people feel disappointed and do not want to make friends anymore.

I cannot fully agree with the ideas above since people become true friends over a period of time are checked up for ages. Therefore, after a couple of betrayals we can see if a person is a real friend or not.

To sum up, I would like to stress that the importance of friendship is obvious as our friends are with us throughout the life making us smile, laugh and be always in a good mood.

Hello AnastasiaHugo,

If you have really only been learning for a year, this writing is really impressive! I have only made a few small corrections and one rephrasing. Your essay is not weak or dull! If you are writing articles like this you could include a question to the reader in the first paragraph before you go on to answer it in the rest of the text.

Yes, you can try adding some idioms but don't overdo it as it will spoil the text.

Hope this helps