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Please, help me improve my writing skills! Topic: The most important thing in life is family. It is universally known that people cannot live greatly without a family. However, there is an opinion that family should not be viewed as the most important part of our life. Let us consider it. As for me, the importance of a family is obvious as it has a significant impact on people’s life. First of all, through a family we learn the values of love, trust, hope, belief, cultures, morals, traditions and every little matter which concerns to us. Therefore, a strong foundation for any individual comes from being with a supportive family. The second reason is that family helps to build a trust and hope since they cheer us up to set the goals and achieve them. On the other hand, some people are convinced that a good and happy life is possible without having a family. They claim that friends might understand us better as usually we are at the same age and our problems are very similar. I disagree with the opinion above as friends are likely to turn away when you need them most, whereas a family is always ready to offer a shoulder when everything seems lost. To draw the conclusion, I would like to emphasize that there will always be different opinions on the importance of a family, but my point of view is clearly stated – I think that people are not able to grow up amiable and sociable persons without a family.

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It is universally known that people cannot live greatly without a family. However, there is an opinion that family should not be viewed as the most important part of our life. Let us consider this. 

As for me, the importance of a family is obvious as it has a significant impact on people’s life. First of all, through a family we learn the values of love, trust, hope, belief, cultures, morals, traditions and every little matter which concerns to us. Therefore, a strong foundation for any individual comes from being with a supportive family. The second reason is that family helps to build a trust and hope since they cheer us up to set the goals and achieve them.


On the other hand, some people are convinced that a good and happy life is possible without having a family. They claim that friends might understand us better as usually we are at the same age and our problems are very similar.

I disagree with the opinion above as friends are likely to turn away when you need them most, whereas a family is always ready to offer a shoulder when everything seems lost.

To draw my conclusion, I would like to emphasize that there will always be different opinions on the importance of a family, but my point of view is clearly stated – I think that people are not able to become amiable and sociable persons without a family.

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Absolutely perfect !!!
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I'm sure that paragraph is perfect, I think it's better english than I could write.

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