The reason why I study foreign languages

I'd like to write about why I study foreign languages. There are two main reasons. Firstly, it's because of my dream to work in UN after I graduate from college or university. In order to work there, it's necessary to know at least 2 languages, not only English. It's probably really difficult but I will keep on trying. Secondly, I love American TV dramas, especially "BONES" on FOX. I have been watching this drama from season 1 since I was in primary school. At first, I was watching it in Japanese, but I became interested in watching it in English. I thought, I could feel this drama more directly. The more I watched "BONES", the more I can understand English, and my listening skills are also becoming better. So I still love "BONES" and it's season 9 in Japan now.

The Reasons Why I Study Foreign Languages

I'd like to write about why I study foreign languages. There are (There're) two main reasons. Firstly, it's because of my dream to work in the UN after I graduate from college or university. In order to work there, not only English but also at least two other (2) languages are necessary. It's probably really difficult but I will keep on trying. Secondly (Second), I love American TV dramas especially "BONES" on FOX. I have been watching this drama from season 1 since I was in primary school. At first I was watching this in Japanese, but I came to be interested in watching this in English because I thought I could feel this drama more directly. The more I watched 'BONES' bones, the more I could understand English and my listening skills improved immeasurably. (became better.) So, I still love 'BONES' bones and now it's running season 9 in Japan.

Another impressive piece of writing. Just a couple of issues to mention. In terms of a title, it is accepted practice to write with initial capitals as the heading should encapsule the subject matter and hence carry more significance than the words in the article itself. You mention two reasons, thus need to amend your title accordingly. With reference to 'there're' this is grammatically incorrect as the phrase 'there are' cannot be contracted. In fast speech it can certainly sound this way but it is not considered professional in letters, essays etc. though you  could probably get away with it in emails, text messages. The only time I may use it is if quoting direct from someone - ie he said 'there're five people'. Having used 'firstly', you need to follow this with 'secondly', 'thirdly' etc. You quoted 'Bones' so need to be consistent with your subsequent references to it. Keep up the good work! 

The reason why I study foreign languages

I'd like to write about why I study foreign languages. There're two main reasons. Firstly, it's because of my dream to work in the UN after I graduate from college or university. In order to work there, not only do I need English but also at least 2 languages are necessary. It's probably really difficult but I will keep on trying. Second, I love American TV dramas especially "BONES" on FOX. I have been watching this drama from season 1 since I was in primary school. At first I was watching this in Japanese, but I came to be interested in watching this in English because I thought I could feel understand this drama more directly better. The more I watched Bones, the more I could understand English and my listening skills became better. So I still love Bones and now it's season 9 in Japan.

Nice work Chika,

Just remember that TV programs are proper names so should begin with a capital (big) letter.

Hope this helps

The reason why I study foreign languages.

I'd like to write about why I study foreign languages. There are two main reasons; firstly, it's because of my dream to work in UN after I graduate from college or university. In order to work there, I not only have to learn English but also at least 2 languages are necessary. It's probably really difficult, but I will keep on trying. Second, I love American TV dramas especially "BONES" on FOX. I have been watching this drama from season 1 since I was in primary school. At first I was watching this in Japanese, but I came to be interested in watching this in English because I thought I could feel this drama more directly. The more I watched bones, the more I could understand English and my listening skill became better. So I still love bones and now it's season 9 in Japan.