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I have to do a video about my life in english.. And I'm going to do like "draw my life". Can someone correct the text please?
While I was in the belly of my mother , she and my father thought of the name I would have. There were two options. My mother liked Erika and my father liked Miriam . After much discussion , my father won!
And this is me! My name is Miriam and I was born on March 1, 1989 In a small town near Madrid, Spain
When I was young I was very shy and my mother promised me that if I approached to meet new girls I have a surprise. There was never a surprise but that helped me overcome my shyness .
My first day of school I cried a lot but then I made a lot of friends.
When I was 7, my uncle, who was a handball coach , asked me to start practicing this sport. And I said yes ! I played for seven years and was one of the best experiences of my life for what I learned.
When I finished school, I decided to study law to get the bad guys in jail. But I also wanted to earn my own money so I decided to work with children as a tutor.
My first day I was nervous but I was happy because I knew that the children were learning with me.
I am now tutor of 7 children. But this story is better than what I tell you it
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Hi Miriam,
You could say:
While I was in the belly of my mother, my parents were deciding about what to name me. My mother liked the name 'Erika', while my father preferred 'Miriam'. After much discussion, my father won, and this is me!
My name is Miriam and I was born on March 1, 1989 In a small town near Madrid, Spain.
I was very shy as a child, and my mother told me that new surprises await if I approached new girls. There was never a surprise, but it helped me overcome my bashfulness. Even though I cried a lot on my, I made a lot of friends.
When I was seven years old, my uncle, a handball coach, asked me to start practicing handball. I agreed, and I've been playing the sport for seven years now. It is one of the best experiences of my life.
After finishing school, I decided to study law to put criminals/bad guys in jail. However, I also wanted to earn my own money, so I decided to work with children as a tutor instead.
I was nervous on my first day, but was happy at the same time, knowing that children were learning with me.
I am now tutor of 7seven children. But this story is actually much better than what I've said.
Didn't quite understand the last bit of your sentence but I hope I got the jist of it. Hope this helps!
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