A few words about my life near Paris

Tonight, I wanted to talk about where I live and how I feel about my city. I live in the suburbs of a city about a city 20 km away from Paris. in the suburbs. With the public transportation system you can reach the centre of Paris in less than 30 minutes which is very convenient when you work there or when you just want to go there to hang out.

But the thing is (it is not good English to begin a sentence with "but" or "and") The problem is that I don’t like the town where I live. It’s way too busy, people are always moody, there are huge traffic jams and the air is polluted. There are few parks and playgrounds and there is concrete everywhere. It’s more and more difficult to feel happy in such environment. Especially with kids. I want to give them the best I can and this place is certainly not the best ideal (to not repeat "best") place to live as a kid. I grew up in a much nicer place environment (to not repeat "environment) (in the south of France) and I am therefore a bit ashamed not to be able to give them what I used to have when I was a kid.

But Hopefully everything will change soon as I am applying for a job very far from the Paris region. and In the event that I pass the tests, everything will change in our lives as we will be in another country with a different language, in a multi-cultural environment and in a very big city. But for In the meantime, now, let’s cross our fingers!

Thank you for taking the time to correct my entry!

Very well written as usual William!  Just some minor corrections and rearrangements to make it sound more natural.  Keep up your great work and good luck with the job application!

A few words about my life near Paris

Tonight I want(ed) to talk about where I live and how I feel about my city. I live in a city 20 km (away) from Paris, in the suburbs. *With the public transportation system you can reach the centre of Paris in less than 30 minutes, which is very convenient if when you work there or when you just want to go to hang out.

But the thing is that I don’t like the town where I live. It’s way too busy, people are always moody, there are huge traffic jams and the air is polluted. There are few parks and playgrounds and there is concrete everywhere. It’s more and more difficult to feel happy in such an environment. Especially with kids. I want to give them the best I can, and this place is certainly not the best place to live as a kid. I grew up in a much nicer environment (in the south of France), and I am therefore a bit ashamed not to be able to give them what I used to have when I was a kid.

But hopefully everything will change soon. I am applying for a job very far from the Paris region, and in the event that I pass the tests, everything will change in our life. We will be in another country, with a different language, in a multi-cultural environment, and in a very big city. But for now, let’s cross our fingers!

Thank you for taking the time to correct my entry!

*By public transport / Using public transport you can . .

Very little to correct;  your English is very good.