Writing Practice

This is part of my course work.
I have written about international law.
Please correct errors.

Thnak you,


The information in The Nestles’ infant formula controversy strongly link to the idea that international law is largely a product of states pursuing their own interest as well as a tool of powerful in the lecture. In 1970s, Nestlé has begun to sell infant formula aggressively in developing countries. The problem is that the illiteracy, poverty and unsanitary conditions caused the deaths of hundreds of infants (Stuckler & Nestle, 1994). Expanding Nestle’s expanding business into the to The Third World countries has resulted in promoting the gaps between powerful countries and less powerful countries[1].

International code of marketing of breast milk substitute (WHO, 1981) was established to regulate the Nestle's, or any other company’s, behaviours in order t to avoid the accusation from consumers.[2] WHO’s efforts in 1990s with the International Health Regulations have been called a failure, and noncompliance with these regulations (Fidler, 1996). As findings on current research showed that the majority of formula-feeding mothers did not receive instruction on formula preparation or storage from a health professional (Labiner-Wolfe, Fein & Shealy, 2013), the code does did not seem to be successful.

Considering the malfunction failure of the WHO code, one of the possible solutions is introducing the new international laws which enable to fill the gaps in mothers’ education on safe infant formula. The new rules should not ignore human rights treaties, which is vital step to avoid the settled rules to be irrelevant mentioned in the lecture.[3] In the

According to The limit of International law( ), the authors claimed that the partisan discussion about the paradox of international law was hampered by lack of understanding about how international law really operates.[4] The implication in order for the international laws works properly is that the country should encourage, and inform consumers of how international laws regulate the global business which deal with the infant formula. As a process of the enforcement, the international law should ensure that meaningful information about the correct handling of infant formula, for example.[5] (327words)

>Hi, first off, I think your English is really good for not being native speaking. Secondly, I've made some corrections to your work, but I might have missed a couple. Most of them are small typos or gramatical errors. I highlighted some stuff that I wanted to add a note to, and will comment on them below:

[1]I would try to avoid using the phrase "powerful countries" twice in a sentence. My suggestion instead, would be "between First and Third World countries."

[2]This sentence is very long (also known as a "run-on sentence"). If you could break this idea up into two sentences, it would make it easier for the reader. (I'm sorry I can't be of more help for this point.)

[3]The latter part of this sentence needs some clarification. It's a little unclear what is being discussed. This is how I understand the sentence: "which is vital step to avoid the settled rules to be becoming irrelevant when mentioned in the lecture." Also, as a side note, the phrase "settled rules" could be replaced with something like "established laws", or something similar.

[4]This is also a run-on sentence. If you could break it into two sentences, it would read more naturally.

[5]The phrase "international law" is repeated too much in this small paragraph. I think finding another phrase for "international law" would do well.

I hope my corrections help. I'm not a professional writer, so someone else may have better suggestions for you.