Do you agree or disagree with following statement?
This in a TOEFL writing question.
Do you agree or disagree with following statement?
At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, a lot of universities and colleges always emphasis that study is the most important thing students should do. And they do a lot of supporting on academic parts like give scholarship for students who are good at their grade, or giving funds on researches, or changes equipment in school. But there is rarely news that school gives a high scholarship for students who are good at sports or who are interesting in social activities. In my personal opinion, sports and social activities should accept more attention and receive more financial supports for following reasons.
First, life is not only studying knowledge in school. If we want to live in the world, we must learn how to communicate to others but not just study knowledge. There is a news several days ago. A student study in the USA, her grade is definitely high, and she got the full scholarship in US to finish her phD. After graduating, she went to a company, but she did not know how to communicate with each other. Then she get too much stress, last week she were repatriated because she got metal disease.
Furthermore, sports are the best way to keep healthy. If we only focus on study, most of time, we will just sit and do not move often. It is quite bad for body. Recent research showed that nowadays the percentage of near-sightedness, obesity, spondylosis are much more than before because of people do not move. Encourage students to do sports is the best way to keep them healthy.
Finally, to do social activities is the best way to apply knowledge we have learned in practice. In school, we learned the theories but not actual practice. There is a tendency that company wants to recruit person who has practical experience not only high grade in study. If we can attend a lot of social activities during school, our practical ability must be trained.
All in all, I totally agree with that universities and colleges should support more on sports and social activities. Because it is the right way for helping students to adopt the society indeed after graduation. And help them to keep healthy, to have a great life in the future.
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Corrections · 3
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I think TOEFL writing essay has to be organized according to a specific structure, introduction, 1st paragraph, 2nd paragraph, 3rd paragraph and conclusion. You should follow this structure. The introduction should has the thesis statement which contains the basic ideas of the "3 paragraphs" body.
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Hi Jenny,
On reading your piece I note there are a few grammatical errors that require attention. Let me know if I can assist.
Your positive response to the TOEFL question is good, and may I suggest you could also include other aspects of the topic such as the mental health benefits, stress/anxiety relief, and improved social interaction both at school and in the family home.
I hope this helps.
Kind Regards,
Rick
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On my hamble opinion, it's great :)!
I wish I could wtite like you do ;)!
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