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can someone please help me There is something quite saddening in the moment When I find myself in my room at 3 am Sitting on my bed staring at nothing but her nonexistent presence Digging in the depths of that tempting abyss Waiting for the walls to collapse so I can break free Isn’t it hard that all I want is to stand tall in front of your eyes? That pair of black holes are what I long for, look at me Even though I know you’ll swallow me entirely But there’s no turning back from here You’re halfway here, just push a bit harder So you can pull this out of me And make me feel free once again But in the end, there is nothing I can do With this selflessness inside of me I can’t help but becoming a part of you Cause all of me is already lost in you Forever.

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You're welcome Ivan :) I understand and believe me I'm the same; I write so I'll be corrected, yet I've noticed that maybe they find poetry hard to correct since regular law of writing doesn't apply to it, just as missymarie753 said in her comment. I hope it'll be noticed by a native speaker who likes poetry and that eventually your poem will be corrected. Keep up the good work.
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poetry is devoid of regular laws of writing to most people
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Thank you so much! I posted it because I don't if it has any grammar errors.. but nobody has written anything yet so..
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This is beautiful Ivan, thank you for sharing with us...

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