A Show in the School Music Festival

Yesterday，my classmates and I went to the other school to take part in a music festival. A show was given in the Student's Activity Center at night. About 3000 people watched this show. At the beginning，a representive of the sponsor told a story about why they held this music festival. Then some singers who were not famous sang their original songs and a brunch of dancers danced. I wasn't in a good seat. It's was too noisy where I sat and I was close to the sound equipment. By the way，this show was a strategy of the sponsor's way to popularize their APP. Honestly，I didn't enjoyed this show at all. This was why I left early.

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Sounds like a meaningless music festival.

A show in a school music festival

Yesterday，my classmates and I went to other school to take a music festival. A show was given in the Students' Activity Center at nignt. About 3000 audiences watched this show. At the beginning，a representive of sponsor told a story that why they held this music festival. Then some singers who were not famous sang their original songs and a brunch of dancers danced. I wasn't in a good seat. It's It was too noisy as my where I sat. It was close to the sound equipments equipment. By the way，this show was a strategy of the sponsor's way to popularize their APP. Honorsly Honestly，I didn't enjoyed this show at all. This was why I quited left in the middle.