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future :) There are moments where I think about my future and it confuses me. Since I was a child I always wanted to be a doctor, and while the time passes I still like that idea, help the others, live to serve them, and see the life from another perspective. I was volunteer of the Red Cross I had the opportunity to know many people in the in the hospital, humble persons, with problems, and that put its hopes in you. Many people were saying to me " doctor" , without knowing That I am not yet , and That I was only there helping . But they saw me with the white coat, and they supposed it . It was feeling good, but it also creates a huge responsibility . I saw as several persons died , how there are forgotten persons in hospital without family and also I saw the absence of heart of several doctors , whom are there only because they don't have any another option... The most gratifying of that experience was the gratitude I received from the persons. This is a part of me which wants to take a life to serve to the others . But there is another part of me , egoist . That I would like live for me ,traveling across the world like an ordinary and normal person , going freely where I wants, to places where I won’t be important for anybody and I did not have to worry for anybody, only for me. Just me. I have always liked the languages, and to meet new cultures and new people, I am a creative person and I would like having my own business. To live a calm life with a little bit of adventure. One of my goals is to leave my country. Because here I don't have future, my country is in a bad situation now and I can't stay here. But the best thing is if i'll go away with an already reached career. This is my quandary , if I continue my Doctor 's way , or I change all my plans and start to study another Shorter career, according to my personality, to Live through this another life where I work for me ... These are my worries now , future depends on what I'm going to choose . I just need orientation, time to Clarify my thought, and especially support. But I know that whatever happens, it will help me to grow as a person . I trust myself and what I can be. I’m from Venezuela, I’m practicing my English I’ll be glad if you correct me!!! That’s my first entry!! Thank you!!

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future :)

There are moments where I think about my future and it confuses me. Since I was a child I always wanted to be a doctor, and as time passes I still like the idea to help others, live to serve them, and see life from another perspective. I was a volunteer for the Red Cross and I had the opportunity to meet many people in the hospital. Humble people, with problems, that put their hopes in me. Many people were calling me "doctor," without knowing I'm not yet a doctor, and that I was only there to help. But they saw me with the white coat, and they assumed I was another doctor. It was a good feeling, but it also created a huge responsibility. I saw as several persons died, how there are forgotten people in hospital without family. I also saw the absence of heart of several doctors, whom are there only because they don't have any another option... The most gratifying of that experience was the gratitude I received from the people. This is the part of me which wants to live a life to serve others . 

But there is another part of me: the egotist. That is, I would like to live for me, traveling across the world like an ordinary person, going freely where I want. To places where I won’t be important to anybody and I do not have to worry about anybody, only for myself. Just me. I have always liked languages, and to meet new cultures and new people. I am a creative person and I would like having my own business. To live a calm life with a little bit of adventure.

One of my goals is to leave my country because here I don't have a future. My country is in a bad situation now and I can't stay here. But the best thing is if I'll go away having already reached a career.
This is my quandary. Should I continue my Doctor 's way? Or change all my plans and start to study another shorter career better suited to my personality? To live a life where I work for myself ... These are my worries now. My future depends on what I'm going to choose. I just need orientation, time to clarify my thoughts, and I especially need support. But I know that whatever happens, it will help me to grow as a person. I trust myself and what I can be.

I’m from Venezuela, I’m practicing my English. I’ll be glad if you correct me!!! That’s my first entry!! Thank you!!

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An excellent job! An incredibly interesting read as well. A suggestion would be to remove the spaces before your commas. Other than that, most of the errors were minor grammatical ones and you will surely grow out of them as you continue to practice. I really wish you best of luck in deciding on your future. A good option may be those Doctors Without Borders type of programs that allow you to travel to foreign countries and provide assistance to local communities. You have my well wishes. If you have any questions at all, don't hesitate to message me. :)

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