A New Life in a small city

I have escaped from the city of Beijing, where I have been for the past six years. Beijing, the capital of China, is famous for its poor-quality air conditions. I realized that it would be a disaster to live there all my life since the air pollution would damage significantly my health. In fact, my family, used to live with me in that city, headed to my hometown during the last Spring Festival, and never turned back again to Beijing. Although there are plenty of job opportunities in this city [this phrase should be kept together rather than split], especially in the IT field, it is no longer attractive to me. I don't just need work. I should take my family's well-being into consideration.
Since early this week [no comma] we have been in my wife's hometown, a pretty and tiny city in north-west China. Most of her relatives are living in this city. Over the upcoming months [no comma] I will enjoy the low pace of life here. After having worked for nearly 8 years since graduation, I feel it necessary for me to get away from working for some time [Either 'so' or 'during which'] I can concentrate on my English study.

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A New Life in a small city

I have escaped from the city of Beijing, where I have been for the past six years. Beijing, the capital of China, is famous for its poor-quality air conditions (poor air quality). I realized that it would be a disaster to live there all my life, since the air pollution would damage significantly my health significantly. In fact, my family, who used to live with me in that city, headed to my hometown in during the last Spring Festival, and never turned back again returned to Beijing. Although there are plenty of job opportunities , especially in the IT field, in this city, it has not longer been is no longer attractive to me. What I need is not just working; I should take my family well-being into consideration (as well).
Since early this week, we have been in my wife's hometown, a pretty and tiny city in north-west China. Most of her relatives are living in this city. Over the following months, I will enjoy the low pace of life here. After having worked for nearly 8 years since graduation, I feel it necessary for my me to get away from working for some time, when so that I can concentrate on my English study.