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story It was a night of august and the weather was perfect. I could see the stars and the gibbous moon. I was walking in the forest behind my house and there was a mound in front of me so it was impossible for me to see very far over the bump. I decided to continue because I was curious to discover what there was after the hummock for the only reason that I have never been there before. When I finally arrived on the top of the bump I has been stunned by what I was perceiving. There were many squalid things and it was not the most pleasant moment of my life. The first thing in which in what I paid attention was the cabins in the middle of my sight. It was really strange. I was asking me who could dwell in this horrible place. I always walked around this place, however, I have never seen someone who could have lived at this place. It was very kinky because between me and the house there was a marsh and a boat which looked like a stranded one. I was asking to me how this person could convey all his furniture. I tried to get closer to be able to figure out how he did to live here. I have to admit it was a little bold because I didn't what he could have happened. This man could be armed and I didn't have a clue. I was very close of the house and a stout man went outside with a firearm. Nobody can figure out the upheaval there was inside of me at this very moment. I stayed still for a while and the plump man screamed at me:''Leave this place and never come back''. I did what he requested and I ran as fast as I could. I have never come back near of this bump since then.

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It was a night in August and the weather was perfect. I could see the stars and the gibbous moon. I was walking in the forest behind my house and there was a mound in front of me. This bump made it impossible to see over it. I decided to continue because I was curious to discover what there was after the hummock for the sole purpose of having never been there before. When I finally arrived on the top of the bump I had been stunned by what I was perceiving. There were many squalid things and it was not the most pleasant moment of my life. The first thing in which in what I paid attention to was the cabins in the middle of my sight. It was really strange. I was asking myself, who could dwell in this horrible place? I always walked around this area (changed this to area due to repetition of the word place), however, I have never seen someone who could have lived here. It was very kinky because between me and the house there was a marsh and a boat which looked like a stranded one. I was asking to myself how this person could convey all of his furniture. I tried to get closer so I would be able to figure out how he managed to live here. I have to admit, it was a little bold too because I didn't know what could happened(not sure if you're talking about not knowing what the man could do or or not knowing in a general sense). This man could be armed and I wouldn't have a clue. I was very close to the house when a stout man came outside with a firearm. Nobody can comprehend the upheaval there was inside of me at this very moment. I stayed still for a while and the plump man screamed at me, ''Leave this place and never come back''. I did what he requested and I ran as fast as I could. I have never gone back near of this bump since then.

 

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