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女丑 - 死人的上帝 孙坚在公墓。大地里面在他都千的士兵,在战役搏斗为国和祭品他们的生命搏斗为国和蜀国。吴国的王国在危急的形势。为国的战争不是好和刘备不要给孙坚的放弃。孙坚现在他生命做太大的仪式。 “女丑!”孙坚说。“你是的人统治我的士兵,在天他们坠落战役的田地。我问题你给他们会我。我需要他们搏斗曹操和刘备。“一个声音回答:” 孙坚!你做的错误我也做了。曹操和刘备是很强壮的,也是第十个日我是朝了。你不患病相同的命运。我给你我孩子们的命令。我要你传播我的名字。你尊重我,你给我祭品和说人我在一天是他们的上帝。每个人在一天死和我是他们的女王。“ 当鲜开始正东。土壤突然的敞开和骨骼们有刀,矛和弓出来了:死人的军队。女丑的军队现在孙坚的命令。有他们,孙坚有一个机会获得战争朝为国和蜀国。他们给对手死和害怕。孙坚的士兵但愿不很恐惧的看他们新的同志。 孙坚发誓了在的天服务女丑。谁命令的死人也命令生动的人。 TRANSLATION: Nü Chou – Goddess Of The Dead Sun Jian is standing on a graveyard. Inside the earth lie thousands of his soldiers, who sacrificed their lives for him in the battle against Wei and Shu. The kingdom of Wu is in a critical condition. The war is not going well against Wei and Liu Bei refuses to surrender to Sun Jian. Now Sun Jian is doing the biggest religious ceremony in his life. “Nü Chou!” Sun Jian says. “You are the one that rules my men, since the day they died on the battlefield. I beg you now to bring them back to me. I need my men to fight against Cao Cao and Liu Bei.” A voice answers: “Sun Jian! You just made the same mistake as I did. Cao Cao and Liu Bei are as strong as the ten suns I was facing against. But you shall not suffer the same fate. I give you the command over my children. In return I want you to spread my name. Honor me, bring me sacrifices and tell everybody that on day that I will become the Goddess of them. Everybody will die one day and then I become their Queen.” The earth began to tremble. Suddenly, the ground opened and skeletons with swords, spears and bows came out: The Army Of The Dead. Nü Chou’s army is now under the control of Sun Jian. With them Sun Jian has a chance of winning the war against Wei and Shu. They will bring death and fear to the enemy forces. Hopefully Sun Jians living soldiers won’t be scared of their new comrades too much. Sun Jian swore Nü Chou to serve her from this day. Whoever controls the Dead controls the Living.

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Nü Chou – Goddess Of The Dead 

The earth began to tremble. Suddenly, the ground opened and skeletons with swords, spears and bows came out: The Army Of The Dead. Nü Chou’s army is now under the control of Sun Jian. With them Sun Jian has a chance of winning the war against Wei and Shu. They will bring death and fear to the enemy forces. Hopefully Sun Jians living soldiers won’t be scared of their new comrades too much.
Sun Jian swore Nü Chou to serve her from this day. Whoever controls the Dead controls the Living.

霎時間天搖地動, 佩帶刀槍弓箭的骷髏一躍而起, 此乃所謂亡者之軍. 女丑的死亡部隊聽命於孫堅, 得其所助, 孫堅贏了魏蜀. 他們帶給敵軍死亡與無比的恐懼, 幸好孫堅的活人部隊並不太害怕他們的新夥伴.

孫堅承諾從此供奉女丑, 號令亡軍者亦號令活者.

 

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女丑 - 死人的上帝

孙坚站在墓地。大地里面是数以千计的士兵。他们为魏、蜀而战。吴国的王国在危急的形势。魏国的战争不好且刘备不愿向孙坚的投降。孙坚现在在举行他生命中最大的仪式。

“女丑!”孙坚说。“你是的人统治我的士兵,在天他们坠落战役的田地。我问题你给他们会我。我需要他们搏斗曹操和刘备。“一个声音回答:” 孙坚!你只是犯了和我相同的错误。曹操和刘备是很强大的,也是第十个日我是朝了。你不患病相同的命运。我给你我孩子们,而作为回报,我要你告诉人们我的名字。你尊重我,你给我祭品和说人我在一天是他们的上帝。每个人都在同一天死而我将成为他们的女王。“

当鲜开始正东。土壤突然的敞开和骨骼们有刀,矛和弓出来了:死人的军队。女丑的军队现在孙坚的命令。有他们,孙坚有一个机会获得战争朝为国和蜀国。他们给对手死和害怕。孙坚的士兵但愿不很恐惧的看他们新的同志。

孙坚发誓为在天的女丑服务。谁命令的死人也命令活人。

TRANSLATION:

Nü Chou – Goddess Of The Dead

Sun Jian is standing on a graveyard. Inside the earth lie thousands of his soldiers, who sacrificed their lives for him in the battle against Wei and Shu. The kingdom of Wu is in a critical condition. The war is not going well against Wei and Liu Bei refuses to surrender to Sun Jian. Now Sun Jian is doing the biggest religious ceremony in his life.

“Nü Chou!” Sun Jian says. “You are the one that rules my men, since the day they died on the battlefield. I beg you now to bring them back to me. I need my men to fight against Cao Cao and Liu Bei.” A voice answers: “Sun Jian! You just made the same mistake as I did. Cao Cao and Liu Bei are as strong as the ten suns I was facing against. But you shall not suffer the same fate. I give you the command over my children. In return I want you to spread my name. Honor me, bring me sacrifices and tell everybody that on day that I will become the Goddess of them. Everybody will die one day and then I become their Queen.”

The earth began to tremble. Suddenly, the ground opened and skeletons with swords, spears and bows came out: The Army Of The Dead. Nü Chou’s army is now under the control of Sun Jian. With them Sun Jian has a chance of winning the war against Wei and Shu. They will bring death and fear to the enemy forces. Hopefully Sun Jians living soldiers won’t be scared of their new comrades too much.

Sun Jian swore Nü Chou to serve her from this day. Whoever controls the Dead controls the Living.

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Nü Chou – Goddess Of The Dead 

“Nü Chou!” Sun Jian says. “You are the one that rules my men, since the day they died on the battlefield. I beg you now to bring them back to me. I need my men to fight against Cao Cao and Liu Bei.” A voice answers: “Sun Jian! You just made the same mistake as I did. Cao Cao and Liu Bei are as strong as the ten suns I was facing against. But you shall not suffer the same fate. I give you the command over my children. In return I want you to spread my name. Honor me, bring me sacrifices and tell everybody that on day that I will become the Goddess of them. Everybody will die one day and then I become their Queen.”

"女丑," 孫堅說, "你是我的子民的統治者, 自從他們戰死沙場那一刻起. 我祈求你將他們還給我, 我需要他們替我對抗曹操與劉備." 這時有人回答:"孫堅, 你犯下與我相同之過(錯), 曹操與劉備的力量有如我所面對的十個太陽, 然而你將擁有不同的命運, 我賜予你向我的子民發號施令的能力, 同時我要你回報以替我傳播聲名, 榮耀我, 向我進貢, 告訴眾人有朝一日我將統治他們, 人皆不免一死, 屆時我將為其女王." (It is 后羿, the husband of 嫦娥, that faced the ten suns in Chinese legend. I am not sure if 女丑 is 后羿 here.)

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Nü Chou – Goddess Of The Dead 


Sun Jian is standing on a graveyard. Inside the earth lie thousands of his soldiers, who sacrificed their lives for him in the battle against Wei and Shu. The kingdom of Wu is in a critical condition. The war is not going well against Wei and Liu Bei refuses to surrender to Sun Jian. Now Sun Jian is doing the biggest religious ceremony in his life.

Let me try for the first paragraph:

女丑- 亡者之神

孫堅立於公墓, 底下躺著為他打下的戰役而犧牲的成千上萬士兵. (所謂"一將功成萬骨枯"). 吳國當前的形勢正處於緊要關頭, 對魏國之戰出師不利, 而劉備也堅決不肯投降. 孫堅正面臨生命中最神聖的一刻. (I am not sure of the last sentence.)

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@Willie: Thank you very much for the tip. I already thought so that my Chinese is not good enough for stories like this, but at least I tried. But please check my newest English notebook entry. It is not my intention to write actual happened stories. It is all my fantasy. :) @brook: Sure I will carry on writing. But no, this is not an actual happened story. Please watch my lates English notebook entry. You will find all the answers there.

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