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Could you please correct my short writing? Could you please correct my sentences to sound natural like a native English speaker says? I was updating my website when the power was completely out. I called the electricity service to report and found out that the service would resume only by 3PM in my area. * Is "completely" needed in the first sentence? Or unecessary to sound natural? * Is "found out" a proper verb? How about "was told" instead? * How about "in my neighborhood" or "in my block" instead of "in my area"?

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Could you please correct my short writing?

Could you please correct my sentences to sound natural like a native English speaker says?

I was updating my website when the power was completely went out. I called the electricity service to report it and found out that the service would resume only by power wouldn't be back on until [1, 2] 3PM in my area.

* Is "completely" needed in the first sentence? Or unecessary to sound natural? [3]

* Is "found out" a proper verb? How about "was told" instead? [4]

* How about "in my neighborhood" or "in my block" instead of "in my area"? [5]

 

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[1] Saying that "the service will resume" is correct, but it is very formal.  The electricity company is likely to use such wording in any official communication.  For example:

"We advise customers that service will resume at approximately 3PM."

It is more colloquial to say that "the power will be back on".

 

[2] If the power will be back on promptly, you can say the following:

"I was told the power will be back on by 3PM."

However, if the power will take a long time to return, you can emphasize the outage by saying the following:

"I was told the the power wouldn't be back on until 3PM".

 

[3] It is not necessary. Because electricity cannot be "partially" out, there's no need to say that it was "completely" out.

 

[4] Either phrase is perfectly natural. Yet "was told" is slightly better.  "Found out" may mean that you listened to a recorded message.  "Was told" suggests that you spoke with a person.

 

[5] "In my area" is more natural. However, if you live in a city where it is possible for one area to have no power while other areas still have power, then "in my block" would be appropriate.

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Could you please correct my short writing?

Could you please correct my sentences to sound natural like a native English speaker says?

I was updating my website when the power was completely out. I called the electricity service to report and found out that the service would resume only by 3PM in my area.

I was updating my website when the power went out. I called the electricians to report it and found out that the service would be back at 3PM.


* Is "completely" needed in the first sentence? Or unecessary to sound natural? Unecessary, change to went to make it more natural
* Is "found out" a proper verb? How about "was told" instead? Either one will work and sound good
* How about "in my neighborhood" or "in my block" instead of "in my area"? Because you are telling the story we just know that you are talking about your area :-)

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