The brain as an attic

"The brain is like an empty attic filled with the items you want, so you should carefully choose the items and pick the ones that are going to help you. It's a mistake to think that the attic has flexible walls that stretch as you put new things in it. After a while you will have to forget something old as you learn something new."

Then I had a look at his astronomy book and thought "So, what would be the difference between earth going around the Sun or Moon? How would it help you in investigating a case?" but I thought it would sound unwelcome to him and I didn't ask it. ButI couldn't help smiling at the titles of his books. They covered everything from history to anatomy.

Above was a piece of Sherlock Holmes story, narrated by Dr. Watson. I listened to the podcast and then retold it from memory. Can you please correct it for me?

Thanks a lot.

Good job, Mehrin!  What a great idea to practice both listening and writing :)

Brain as an attic

"The brain is like an empty attic filled with items you want. So you should carefully choose the items and pick the ones that are going to help you most. It's a mistake to think that our attic has flexible walls that stretch to accommodate the new things in it. After all, you will probably to forget older things as you learn newer things."

Then I had a look at his astronomy book and thought, "So, what would the difference be between Earth going around the Sun or the Moon? How would it help you in investigating a case?". But I thought it would sound unwelcome of him and I didn't ask. But I couldn't help smiling at the titles of his books. They covered everything from history to anatomy.

Above was a piece of Sherlock Holmes story, narrated by Dr. Watson. I listened to the podcast and then retold it from memory. Can you please correct it for me?

Thanks a lot.

The Brain as an Attic

"The brain is like an empty attic filled with the items you want, so you should carefully choose the items and pick the ones that are going to help you. It's a mistake to think that the attic has flexible walls that stretch as you put new things in it. After a while you will have to forget something old as you learn something new."

Then I had a look at his astronomy book and thought, "So, what would be the difference between Earth going around the Sun or Moon? How would it help you in investigating a case?" But I thought it would sound unwelcoming to him, so and I didn't ask it. But I couldn't help smiling at the titles of his books. They covered everything from history to anatomy.

Above was is a piece an exerpt of a Sherlock Holmes' story, narrated by Dr. Watson. I listened to the podcast and then retold it from memory. Can Would you please correct it for me?

Thanks a lot.

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and pick the ones  "picking the ones" would be better.

 Earth going around the Sun or Moon?- The earth going around the sun or the moon going around the earth. ("revolving around" is better.)  The way it is written now it implies that the earth revolves around both the sun and the moon. I believe that "Sun" and "Moon" are capitalized in this context only because "Earth" should be capitalized.  If you wrote "the earth" then none of them should be capitalized.

, so and  The "so" is better.  The comma is necessary in standard American English.