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[11] You can say either "juror 8" or "the eighth juror".
[12] You can't really 'find' a possibility. A better word here would be to 'determine' the possibility.
[13] I don't understand the phrase "process justice". I would understand the phrase "process of justice", but not how it applies here.
[14] You have said that 'someone' was not reasonable. Someone is singular, referring to a single man or woman. Therefore, the following pronoun should be either 'he' or 'she'. If you meant that more than one person was not reasonable, you should replace 'someone' with "some of the jurors".
[15] It is important to capitalize the first word of a new sentence.
[16] When talking about a vote, the word 'minority' would be better than 'minorities'. The word 'minorities' usually carries a different meaning when talking about people.
[17] I am not sure of your meaning here. You may mean either of the following:
"If not, the minorities should follow the majority in our daily life."
"It is not the minorities who follow the majority in our daily life."
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Even though I have made many corrections and added many comments, your writing is very good and very natural. Great job!
12 Angry Men
After having watched the movie 12 Angry Men [1] last night, I kept thinking about it.
If the whole world believes that the earth is the center of the universe, would you stand up to argue as what Giordano Bruno did ? [2]
If you are among the jury like in the movie shows, would you follow the other 11 people and put the kid to the chair ?
The movie tells a story about a kid who is accused of murdering his father, and he will be sentenced to death if the jury reaches consensus that he is guilty [3]. Only one man (juror 8) has doubts about it, and he sticks to his only mind [4], then finally persuades the others and all the jurors reach a unanimous consensus that the boy is not guilty.
The story is amazing. I was totally enjoyed by the excellent arguments and their the actors' [5] outstanding acting [6] skills even though it just happened in a small restroom and just one scene [7].
About the jury system, I knew nothing about it since we do not have it in China. But I did some research afterwards. Murdering Murder belongs to the is a criminal case where, to reach the verdict, the prosecution has to prove the case beyond a reasonable doubt, unless whereas the defendant defense [8] can prove there is a reasonable doubt. If there is a possibility [9] that the suspect could be innocent, they should be acquitted of the crime.
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[1] Each word in the title of a book or movie is capitalized.
[2] There is no space (' ') before the punctuation which ends a sentence (. ! ?).
[3] The phrase "reaching concensus" only means reaching agreement. It is possible for the jury to reach a consensus that the accused is innocent.
[4] This is not a phrase in English, and a native speaker is unlikely to understand your meaning. A more natural phrase would be that he "sticks to his opposing view".
[5] The word 'their' is a pronoun, but you have not yet mentioned the actors. That is, 'their' does not refer to anyone.
[6] If we replace 'their' with "the actors", it is a little redundant to include the word 'acting' in following phrase, "acting skills". However, I don't want to remove this word because it is correct in your original sentence.
[7] I haven't seen the movie. Do you mean that the entire movie comprised a single scene set in a restroom?
[8] I have changed your word only to balance your use of the word 'prosecution'. In a criminal case, the 'prosecution' is one team, while the 'defense' is the other team. The alternative is to refer to the 'prosecutor' and the 'defendant', both individuals.
[9] In terms of law, you're mistaken. In terms of grammar, your sentence is fine and everyone would know what you mean.
[10] Italki limits the length of replies. If you'd like me to correct the remainder of your writing, please reply.
Great writing, Eric. It's very good that you can write about serious matters such as this. I would like to draw your attention to this sctructure "I was totally enjoyed". It's a very common mistake. You should remember that passive is used when the 'doer' isn't important or is unknown. In your sentence the doer is 'i' so there's no need to use passive. You can study it here:http://www.bbc.co.uk/worldservice/learningenglish/grammar/learnit/learnitv65.shtml
Who is responsible for the judgement ? The jury. In this movie, the [11] juror 8 constantly stresses that we have they had no solid evidence to prove the kid is guilty or not and we they could not even figure that out, yet that is was not our their job,; our their job is was to find [12] the possibility that the suspect could be innocent, and if we they find found it, the boy should be found not guilty.
The file film is trying to illustrate that all the perspectives can reach consensus through thorough discussion or deliberation like what in the movie shows. What makes the other jurors change their mind and approve the agree with juror 8 ? I think that it is because they all follow two kinds of rules: one is logical rules logic, the other is process justice [13].
In the movie, someone is not that reasonable in the beginning, but they he [14] finally give gave in after they the arguments are approved proven to be illogical. The [15] second rule is the process justice [13]. In the movie we can see how a unanimous ballot works. First, we can see a not-guilty vote of 1:11 and finally a vote of 12:0. Everyone has to respect the vote and justify it, even the minorities [16] have the right to speak,. It is not the minorities should follow the majority in our daily life [17].
This movie demonstrates democracy, justice and equality, and that's why I like it.
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