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Family and life Today, I would like to talk about my family and life. About a year ago, my grandfather passed away because of cancer. And just a couple months ago, I came back from New Zealand just because of him. He was my biggest reason to return from New Zealand, to start my university life in Japan. He made me realize how my family means to me and what do you have to care most. At this moment, I did not know that he has cancer. For that reason, returning to Japan and seeing his last moment was like a feeling of following a path which has been already decided. I wish he could see my entrance ceremony. And now, even my mother got a serious sickness. Do you really care about your family? I respect that we all have different culture back ground and customs, but it’s little bit sad for me to see my friend treating family with unrespect attitude. This might be a heavy theme for you, but this is my title for 2014, Family and Life.

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Family and life

Today, I would like to talk about my family and life.
About a year ago, my grandfather passed away due to cancer. ['due to' is usually how we talk about cause of death] And Just a couple months before that, I came back from New Zealand just because of him. ['a couple months ago' would mean November or December 2014. also, using 'just' twice is odd] He was my biggest reason to return from New Zealand and start my university life in Japan. He made me realize how much my family means to me and reminded me what I should care about most. [Keep the subject "I", since that's the subject at the beginning of the sentence.] At that time, I did not know that he had cancer. ['at this moment' means right now] For that reason, returning to Japan and seeing his last moment was like a feeling of following a path which had been already decided. [decided in the past, right?] I wish he could have seen my entrance ceremony. And now, even my mother has a serious sickness. [because you used the word 'now', keep your verb in the present for a more natural sound.]
Do you really care about your family? I respect that we all have different cultural backgrounds and customs, but it’s little bit sad for me to see my friends treating family with disrespect. [or 'disrespectful attitudes']
This might be a heavy theme for you, but this is my title for 2014, Family and Life.

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As far as family respect is concerned. Elders like Grand Father or Grand Mothers are considered here pious persons here. There are great rewards in Islam for respecting the elders. For instance a person will be saved for suffering the day of resurrection.
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I feel really sorry for your Grand Father Lost. I hope his soul be resting in peace. But I'm happy though, that you've spend some everlasting moment with him. I'd lost my Grand Father when I was little, so I don't remember any of his resounding memories.

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