[Is] Iincreasing the price of petrol is right or not?

Many people think increasing the price of the petrol is a[n] efficient way to control the traffic in the city and prevent pollution from being becoming more serious in our environment. However, higher petrol price[s] may cause some other problems, and there should be more methods to protect our environment and solve traffic problems.

For the people who believe it’s better to increase the price of the petrol has have their valid reasons. Petrol is a precious resources on our planet. It couldn’t can't be recreated renewed if it’s used up. As the development of the modernization, transportation is much busier than decades ago. It’s more difficult and time[-]consuming for people to travel if [there is] the a serious traffic jam is serious on the road. Even if people choose to walk and riding ride bicycle[s] outside, they can’t enjoy their journey because of the worse air quality caused by fuel gas exhaust from vehicles. Since petrol is the source of gasoline, increasing the price of petrol is an efficient way to prevent people to use from using their private cars too often in big cities. Furthermore, higher price[s] also strengthens raises citizens’ awareness on of/about using precious resources carefully on the Earth.

Increasing the price of petrol is right or not?

Many people think increasing the price of the petrol is a efficient way to control the traffic in the city and prevent pollution from being more serious in our environment. However, higher petrol price may cause some other problems, and there should be more methods to protect our environment and solve traffic problems.

For the people who believe it’s better to increase the price of the petrol has their valid reasons. Petrol is a precious resources on our planet. It couldn’t be recreated if it’s used up. As the development of the modernization, transportation is much busier than decades ago. It’s more difficult and time consuming for people to travel if the traffic jam is serious on the road. Even if people choose to walk and riding bicycle outside, they can’t enjoy their journey because of the worse air quality caused by fuel gas from vehicles. Since petrol is the source of gasoline, increasing the price of petrol is an efficient way to prevent people to use their private cars too often in big cities. Furthermore, higher price also strengthens citizens’ awareness on using precious resources carefully on the Earth.

However, it’s not easy to solve traffic and environment problems only by making the price of petrol more expensive. For the people who can’t afford the new petrol price, they may stop to buy new private cars. Thus, the pressure of the car market will be higher that the manufacturers need to create other better methods to attract customers. What’s more, with less people driving on the streets, more people will take public transportation, in which case the city will become very crowded. Last but not the least, pollution of the environment is related to many factors such as emission of the poisonous gas from factories, the inappropriately use of water, the lack of politic rules, etc. It would not be improved if there is no enough attention paid to other causes except for the price of petrol.

All in all, increasing the price of petrol is only one of the methods to make traffic and environment problems less serious. Government should also make rules to reduce the emission of harmful gases from factories and encourage people to use resources properly. It’s everyone’s duty to take part in the activities to make our life more convenient and comfortable.

This is an academic article of quite some sophistication and not easy to correct. To assist the writing of a better article, knowledge of the intended audience would make it easier. Is it directed towards educating lay people or to academics?

For the 1st paragraph, you may consider the following alternative.

"It is common belief that increasing the price of petrol is an efficient means of controlling city traffic and environmental pollution. However, higher petrol prices may cause other problems. Alternate strategies should also be considered."

The second paragraph has valid reasons for increasing the price of petrol. The third paragraph is rather confusing. Are they reasons for not increasing the price of petrol? If so, the content is invalid. Reducing car purchase or car use and encouraging use of public transportation is the exact intention of raising petrol prices. Just because factory pollution will not be decreased is also a poor reason for not increasing petrol prices.