Hong Kong

There are many reasons why I love Hong Kong besides the fact that it is my motherland. First, there are no earthquakes in Hong Kong like in China, no tornados like in America, and no volcanic eruptions like in Japan. 

Politically, Hong Kong citizens can enjoy extraordinary freedoms. For example, we can speak freely, practice our own religions, and stage public protests on streets. Despite those rights, Hong Kong still has many drawbacks. For one, our chief executive is not elected by the Hong Kong people but a committee of businessmen who are heavily influenced by the central Chinese government in Beijing. To Hong Kongers, they seem to only represent the voice of Beijing and not of the Hong Kong people. This led to distrust in the Hong Kong government, and thus, the Occupy Central movement began. We, as citizens of Hong Kong, must express our disappointment and dissatisfaction to both the Hong Kong and Chinese government for not giving us a de facto universal suffrage for chief executive elections. The decision of the Chinese People's National Congress stated that candidates must first be screened out by a committee before public's selection. However, that opposes the right of "One country, Two systems" for Hong Kong. It is not a true democracy where Hong Kongers are allow to nominate candidates to their satisfaction. 

I really hope that I would be able to elect the chief executive in Hong Kong one day in the future.

*** I see this as a narrative/persuasive essay, so I am going to comment on how you believe your standpoint is right and morally correct. And since I read it as an essay, I made corrections on the basis that it is formal writing, which means no contractions (don't -> do not) and no acronyms (CE -> chief executive). 

As a person who grew up in HK and who kept up with the news of the Occupy movement, I feel that you should add more details about the movement. Talk about the student movement with Joshua Wong (黃之鋒) and the pepper spray and tear gas on Sep. 28, 2014. Talk about the conflict over the interpretation of the Sino-British Joint Declaration (中英聯合聲明) between the UK and China. At the end where you write "I....in the future" (see the last sentence), I think you should talk about the future of HK if you can vote for the next CE. Imagine what a better future would look like. 

Umbrella Revolution 加油! 

Hong Kong

Hong Kong is my motherland. I love this place so much.
In Hong Kong, there are no earthquakes like as there are in China does, there are no tornadoes like as in America does, there are no volcanic eruptions like as in Japan does.

In Hong Kong, we can enjoy extraordinary freedoms.
We can speak freely, we can have our own religions, we can march on streets freely (well, a little freely).

However, despite those advantages, Hong Kong still has many drawbacks.

For one thing, our chief executive is not elected by people but by a committee of businessmen. Those businessmen are mainly loyal to Beijing, which means that our CE don't have to get HongKongers' support but only have to be loyal to our Chinese government.

As a result, HongKongers don't trust the government and thus the 'occupy central' movement is has arisen. We have to express our rage to both hk and Chinese government for not giving us a de facto universal suffrage of CE.
The decision of the people's national congress stated that candidates must first be screened out by a committee before public's selection. That doesn't make our election more democratic, does it?

I really hope that someday I can elect our own CE in HK.

HK IS part of China, but was seized and stolen at gunpoint and with opium boats by the British.  Don't forget the history!