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Could you correct my post, please? Many thanks in advance for your help! Hello! How is it going? What's the weather like? It's a bit snowy here and gloomy. The streets are so slippery because temperatures range from above zero to minus zero. I came home an hour ago- utterly exhausted and ravenously hungry. I ate yesterday's bean soup and some pasta. I did a lot of typing at work today and my eyes are aching. In spite my dauhter is ill ( she has a runny nose and a sore through but, thank goodness, she has no fever) she went to the kindergarten to take part in a Christmas event where she performed as a snowflake. Unfortunately, I couldn't go. My day at work went well. On Friday at four my daughter and I go to the children even devoted to Christmas. It will be held in the Jesus Savior Church which is situated in the central Moscow. On Sunday I will go to a restaurant to celebrate New Year with my colleagues. I bought a blue cocktail dress for this occasion. My ex hasn't visited our dauhter for more than three weeks. Thank goodness, she doesn't miss him and even she doesn't remember him during the day. I must go food shopping. Take care Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year

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Hello! 

How is it going? What's the weather like? It's a bit snowy and gloomy here and gloomy. The streets are so slippery because temperatures range from just above zero to minus zero.
I came home an hour ago- utterly exhausted and [1]ravenously hungry.
I ate yesterday's bean soup and some pasta.
I did a lot of typing at work today and my eyes are aching.
In spite my daughter, despite being ill, is ill ( she has a runny nose and a sore through throat but, thank goodness, she has no fever) she went to the kindergarten to take part in a Christmas event where she performed as a snowflake. Unfortunately, I couldn't go.
My day at work went well.
At four on Friday at four my daughter and I go to the a children's event devoted to Christmas. It will be held in the Jesus Savior Church which is situated in the central Moscow.
On Sunday I will go to a restaurant to celebrate the New Year with my colleagues. I bought a blue cocktail dress for [2]this occasion.
My ex hasn't visited our daughter for more than three weeks. Thank goodness, she doesn't miss him and even she she doesn't even doesn't remember him during the day.
I must go food shopping now
Take care
Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year

 

[1] This isn't incorrect, but you don't really need 'ravenously hungry', just 'ravenous'. I don't think anyone would say 'ravenously hungry', but 'very/extremely' hungry OR 'ravenous'.

 

[2] This isn't incorrect either, but a native would say 'the' rather than 'this'.

 

Very good!

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