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Afraid1 Some of friends asked me "what are you afraid?" I'm afraid of many things.Snake almost people afraid of it.When i was little,about 7-8 years old.There is one snake almost make me die.I was at a small cliff,I even not see the snake clearly,I just feel it near my feet,then I fell down from the cliff,its not high but enough to kill me.When I was rolling I think I will die but suddenly my mother comes into my mind,and I tell myself I cant die,I havent grow up to take care of my mom.And I catch all waht I can catched and try my best to keep me do not fall down.Finally my mother come to save me.When I come to my mom's arms,I begin to cry and hold her leg tightly.

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Some of my friends have asked me "what are you afraid of?" - I'm afraid of many things. Snake almost people afraid of it  Most people are afraid of snakes. When i was little, about 7-8 years old, there was one snake that almost made me die. I was at a small cliff, I even not see the snake clearly I did not see the snake clearly,I just felt it near my feet. I fell down from the cliff, it wasn't high up, but enough to have possibly killed me.When I was rolling I thought I would die, but suddenly my mother comes into my mind, and I told myself I won't die because I havent yet grown up to take care of my mom. And I catch all waht I can catched an I held on to what I could find to try my best to keep me from falling down. Finally, my mother come to save me. When I fell into my mom's arms, I began to cry and hold her tightly.

Hi there, great work! For your next entry, try to work on tenses. You are writing a reflective piece here about an experience, so remember to use the past tense of verbs when describing events. 

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Yes,i forgot,thank you
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Hi, you forgot to use past tense in ur notebook entry ^^

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