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Which version is better? Hi guys, There are 2 versions of my company introduction. Could you kindly give me your opinion about which one is better? If there is any mistake, hopefully get the correction from all. Thanks so much! Version 1: Situated in the Most Livable City of Vietnam, TTDN General Hospital, a member of TMMC Healthcare, is thriving to be amongst the preferential healthcare providers in the City. Our bed capacity is 150 and we have approximately 400 – 500 patient visits a day. TTDN ‘s group of locally and internationally experienced doctors and practitioners, combined with state-of-the-art medical equipment such as CT scanner, digital x-ray machine, 4D ultrasound machine, endoscopy machine, especially 128 multi-slice MSCT scanner with the capacity to precisely detect early stages of cancer, is the key to speed, accuracy and efficiency in medical diagnosis and treatment. The hospital’s operation is computerized managed, in order to reduce the waiting time. We are also amongst the pioneer providers in Da Nang, for introducing the International Patient Service (IPS). Our IPS was introduced to address the medical needs of expatriate community in Da Nang and facilitate inbound medical tourism. Annually, we serve thousands of international patient visits from executive medical screening to critical care. Our professional, friendly and attentive staff is committed to bringing patients the exceptional experience when being treated at TTDN General Hospital. The hospital’s medical staff will go to extra miles to ensure that every patient is well-informed and explained of their conditions, as the motto goes “All for your health.” The version 2 is next

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Which version is better?

Hi guys,
There are 2 versions of my company introduction. Could you kindly give me your opinion about which one is better? If there is any mistake, hopefully get the correction from all. Thanks so much!

Version 1:
TTDN General Hospital, a member of TMMC Healthcare situated in the Most Livable City of Vietnam thrives to be amongst the preferential healthcare providers in the city. Our bed capacity is 150 and we have approximately 400–500 patient visits a day.
TTDN ‘s group of locally and internationally experienced doctors and practitioners, is the key to speed, accuracy and efficiency in medical diagnosis and treatment. Our state-of-the-art medical equipment includes the following: CT scanner, digital x-ray machine, 4D ultrasound machine, endoscopy machine, especially 128 multi-slice MSCT scanner with the capacity to precisely detect early stages of cancer,  The hospital’s operation is computer operated in order to reduce the waiting time.
We are also amongst the pioneer providers in Da Nang, for introducing the International Patient Service (IPS). Our IPS was introduced to address the medical needs of the expatriate community in Da Nang and to facilitate inbound medical tourism. We treat thousands of international patients annually, everything from executive medical screening to intensive care.
Our professional, friendly and attentive staff is committed to giving patients an exceptional experience while being treated at TTDN General Hospital. The hospital’s medical staff will go the extra mile to ensure that every patient is well-informed of their conditions. As our motto goes, “All for your health.”

The version 2 is next

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Hi, I've read both of them and prefer this one; it's much better; it reads well and is more professional. Hope this helps!

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