"May I take your picture?"

Today, I went out for to do my photography homework. (I usually didn't go out. because I like being inside. I think I'm a little bit asocial) I must find rhythm and perspective areas for my homework. I walked around the streets and looked for what can I catch find. I saw three kids watching me when I was taking photos. I wanted to do ask them permission to taking their photos. And So I said, "May I take your picture?" The firstly he one was surprised and looking made a shy expression on his face. But like [only] one or two seconds later he said "Okey!" and excitedly posed like a cool man. *chuckles* I took their picture together and one by one (because they want ask me to do.) These little cuties made me really happy at that moment. And I saw a clown on the street. I guess he was came for an opening [party ?] (inauguration?) (Because I saw a lot of balloons there.) I wanted to take his picture but I acted [felt] really shy. I couldn't ask him. Then, I went to the market and bought tons of chocolate. (Feeling so happy!)
Now, I'm at my dorm. and it's 10:52P.M. at the night. I think I'm a little bit hungry but I don't want to eat my chocolates this early. ~~ So, I'll eat my cakes! I shouldn't forget eating dinner next time...

So guys, this is my day! I'm writing this because getting better at grammar, making sentences and expressing myself.

If I'm wrong somewhere please correct my sentences. Have a nice day!

Aycan, if you use A.M. or P.M. then it is not necessary to add "at night". Some alternatives are: ".. it's 10:52 in the evening." or ".. it's 22:52." or ".. it's nearly eleven at night."

I'll leave "dorm." but really you should have written it in full: dormitory

'bit' wasn't required: "I think I'm a little hungry ..."

(You could have added a picture.)