I am sure with a little practise you'll see an immediate improvement. Your thoughts and logic are clear, and I understand perfectly what you want to say, but I think some revision of verb tenses and pronouns would help you. 

My Very First Note

I registed in this website in 2007, back then I had just graduated from university and was ready to find a job. Life is short, and almost 7 years passed. During these few years, I changed jobs twice two companies, but one thing they have in common is that English skills is are really important. God help me!