A Terrible Rainy Night
It has been raining all day and I feel very cold.I finished my school at 9:50.I ran toward the school gate very quickly as usual.Hardly when I have arrived at the gate,I found there were so many automobiles that I couldn't find my dad's.Finally I found him and his auto in a dark corner far from our school gate,and there were many other autos in front of him that made him be hiiden.The street near the school gate was so crowded,all the bikes,aotos and people wanted to leave but they had no idear including us because of the traffic jam.So we had to wait.When we got home,it was already 10:20!It was too late to do my homework，so I just took a shower and got ready for bed.Now I'm going to sleep,good night!
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Great job! I'm sorry you had such a miserable day! xD I hope my corrections will help you!
A Terrible Rainy Night
It had been raining all day and I felt very cold. I had finished my school at 9:50. I ran toward the school gate very quickly, as usual. Hardly when Just as I have arrived at the gate, I found discovered that there were so many automobiles cars that I couldn't find my dad's. Finally, I found him and his auto car in a dark corner far from our school gate, and there were many other autos cars in front of him that made him be hiiden hid him. The street near the school gate was so extremely crowded; all the bikes, aotos cars and people wanted were trying to leave, but they had no idea, including us, because of the traffic jam. So we had to wait. When we got home, it was already 10:20! It was too late to do my homework, so I just took a shower and got ready for bed. Now I'm going to sleep, good night!
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@Richard thank you:)
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Helly yangyang,
In the United States, we almost always say "car" instead of "automobile" or "auto." Automobile is not wrong, but it is too formal for ordinary conversation.
So to correct your notebook entry:
there were so many cars
I found him and his car
there were many other cars in front of him
This may be different in the UK. I don't know.
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