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Child's play I have asked my friend, if he has ever played Gol de Classe, he said not. I got instigated and I thought weird that he did not know, because he likes really football. So I asked him again, if he ever played 3 dentro 3 fora, and over again he said not. More instigated yet, I explained to him, If he has ever played a game that he cannot let the ball dropping, where he must do the goal when the ball is in the air, but just after doing kick-ups with his attack partner. Then he said: "Ah, yes. I have ever played this game. Over there we called Melê" It's funny as the things are. Even living so near to each other, it can happen that there are variations in relation to the name of a simple game. Italki's friends, please correct me. Thank you in advance.

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Child's play

I have[1] asked my friend,[2] if he has[1] ever played Gol de Classe, he said he has[3] not.
I got instigatedangry[4] and I thought it[5]weird that he did not know about the game[6], because he really likes really[7] football.
So I asked him again[8], if he ever played 3 dentro 3 fora, and over[9] again he said notno[10].

More instigatedangry[4] yet, I explainedasked to[11] him,[2] Ifif he has ever played a game thatwhere[12] he cannot let the ball dropping[13], where he must domake[14] the goal when the ball is in the air, but just after doing kick-ups with his attack partner.[15]

 


Then he said: "Ah, yes. I have ever[16] played this game. Over there we called it[17] Melê"

It's funny as thethese[18] things are.

Even living so near to each other, it can happen that there are variations in relation to the name of a simple game.

Italki's friends, please correct me.
Thank you in advance.

 

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[1] these are not neccesary and complicate the tense/meaing slightly

[2] not neccesary, might imply that the part between "friend" and "he" is not important to the sentence in this format; these sounds like pauses in speaking, but are not work in written form.

[3] could also say "he said no"

[4] instigated is something you do to someone else usually, not usually an emotion or the way you are feeling - as in "he instigated a fight"

[5] clarifies the what was "weird" could also be "it was"

[6] know what? ending with know leaves the reader hanging

[7] more common English word order, adverb before the verb

[8] if you are asking a different question it is not again, may make sense if this is a different form of the same game

[9] "over" implies repetition as in "over, and over again"

[10] more common word choice

[11] it sounds like you are going to ask a question, not state a fact

[12] more common word choice

[13] verb tense - the ball "will drop" not be in a state of dropping - el gerundio does not neccesarily work this way in English, you could have where "he must prevent the ball from dropping" this works because you want to prevent the state of dropping

[14] more common word choice, you "make a goal" in english, it would be understood, but sound weird to a native English speaker

[15] This part sounds a little weird to me, but I do not know the game too well so I am not sure how to describe this as a native English speaker.

[16] "ever" is unnecesary here

[17] "called" what? clarify the object

[18] word choice, use "these" with the plural "things" - would also say more colloquially "funny how these things are"

 

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