would you correct my essay please..? (I'll certainly give it a shot. :) )

Obviously, young people are under great pressure because jobs has have a limit, but the number of young people who especially have high degrees is increasing. They are required to do something beyond their ability in society. They forgo marriage because they are not capable of paying for it. They are depressed and fragile. Since they are young they have not faced difficulties such as war, unlike order older people. This example shows that young people are less happy than order older people.

would you correct my essay please..?

Obviously, young people are under great pressure because jobs have has a limits. But young people, who especially have high degrees, are is increasing. They are required to do something beyond their ability in society. They forgo marriage because they are not capable of paying for it. They are depressed and fragile. Since they are young they have not faced difficulties such as war, unlike other order people. This example shows that young people are less happy than other order people

*Highlighted are where I made corrections*

Very good essay. I hope my corrections helped push you in the right direction, though your English is very good. Keep up the good work!