IELTS writing practice （please help me to correct）

Topic: Some people think that the government should decide which subjects students should study at the university, while others think that students should be allowed to apply for the subject they prefer. Discuss the two views and give your opinion.
After the students finish their high school classes, and prepare for university studying, they will face an important issue, which subject would they learn in university? Some people said, students should be allowed to apply for the subject they prefer, but the other others argued that the government should decide which subject students should learn/study at the university.

They said, <-(a comma is not needed here) it will meet the country’s needs, <-(no comma here either) and also will will also be better for the students to/help the students get a good job after they graduate. But for my part/I beleive things are not so (you caould also say "However, I disagree". On the one hand, the subjects that the government decided/chose will not always meet the needs (of the students) when they students graduate after 4 years, because everything moves so fast. InOn the other hand, if they study the subjects that they do not like, there will be no interest for them to further studystudy further, and no creativeness for their future work and they will go banal/go crazy/become bored.
If the students beare allowed to decide their university’s subject according to their interests, things will be better. Firstly, they will have more passion and willingness to learn more about the subjects, there will be more creativenesses for them, and they will do better in their future work. Secondly, the interests of the young are likely the same toas the needs of the country, because the young always have the curiosity tofor the things which be born just now/new things and are likely to be largein high demand in the future during the development.

Because the country and the young are in the same time, in the same condition, they will always be coincidental about the needs and the interests. (This is a difficult sentence to understand.  You might say, "The young will always know the needs and interests of the country because...")

In conclusion, let the students and the young themselves decide what subject they would are likely to study in university, it and there will be benefits for both, the government and students. There is no need for government to decide the subjects of students’ students' subjects, and I hope that the government should will give them some advice about subjects rather than the a decision.