Talking About The Personal Connections

Many large Korean companies or even public enterprises have personal connections with executives as the central figure. The connections might be built of people who graduated from same school, or come from same home town, or go to the same church, and so on. Every so often the connections create fractions and that fight each other within their own company.
Anyway The employees who belong to the connections can be treated well, but the other employees can be treated unfairly.
It is the dark side of Korean organizational culture, but unfortunately it is quite common in Korea.

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