The monkey
I want to tell you a story happened to me last year.
It was late autumn. My friends and I went for a walk and saw the poster said about an exhibition of monkeys in our town. I'm fond of monkeys, you know, they are such cute and clever animals!:)
So we bought tickets without any hesitation.
Later that day we visited the exhibition. There were a lot of monkeys: some of them were in glass terrariums or in cages, some were sitting on leashes and the other who were smarter and calmer were free to do whatever they wanted. We moved from cage to cage admiring those cute animals. I was so touched that even shed a tear, I was sorry that such cute animals had to be locked in cages.
Then we came up to a man, who had a small nimble and restless monkey on a leash. The monkey was jumping on people, on their shoulders, getting into their bags, pockets and stealing things from there. I had a wallet in my hand and the man who hold the leash asked me to give my wallet to that little beast. I didn't want to do it, because there was a big sum of money in that wallet. But the man assured, that it would be fun and that the monkey wouldn't steal or harm anything. Nevertheless I didn't agree, but the man came up to me, literally snatched the wallet from my hands and gave it to the monkey. She immediately opened and got some banknotes out of it. I panicked and tried to get my wallet back, but the monkey became so angry, she start screaming shrilly, and after my another attempt to take my wallet she attacked my leg and bit it. The man and some other people were laughing and some were panicking too but none ventured to help me.
After a long fight I finally had my wallet back and we went home but for a long time I could hear the monkey agressively screaming after me!
P.S:) Don't take this story seriously, I really had a lot of fun:)
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The monkey
I want to tell you a story that happened to me last year. (Or "I want to tell you about something that happened...)
It was late autumn. My friends and I went for a walk and saw a the poster which announced said about an exhibition of monkeys in our town. (It didn't literally announce it as someone would with his or or voice, but it's understood that it's communicating information about an event.) I'm fond of monkeys, you know; they are such cute and clever animals!:) (Note the semi-colon.)
So we bought tickets without any hesitation. (Or "immediately" or "right away".)
Later that day we visited the exhibition. There were a lot of monkeys: some of them were in glass terrariums or in cages, some were sitting and on leashes, and the others who were smarter and calmer were free to do whatever they wanted. (1. A terrarium is something used for much smaller animals than monkeys; I would say "behind glass". 2. Note "sitting and on leashes"; I don't think they were sitting on top of leashes, but they were sitting down and they were attached to leashes.) We moved from cage to cage admiring those cute animals. I was so touched that I even shed a tear. (I just added "I" to the second clause.) I was sorry that such cute animals had to be locked in cages.
Then we came up to a man who had a small, nimble and restless monkey on a leash. (I just added the comma to the series of adjectives.) The monkey was jumping on people's shoulders, getting into their bags and pockets and stealing things from there. I had a wallet in my hand and the man who held the leash asked me to give my wallet to that little beast. (I just updated "hold" to the past tense "held".) I didn't want to do it, because there was a big sum of money in that wallet. (Or "a lot of money" or "a big wad of money" or "a big wad of bills".) But the man assured me that it would be fun and that the monkey wouldn't steal (from anyone) or harm anything. Nevertheless I didn't agree, but the man came up to me, literally snatched the wallet from my hands and gave it to the monkey. She immediately opened it and got some banknotes out of it. I panicked and tried to get my wallet back, but the monkey became so angry, she started screaming shrilly, and after I made my another attempt to take my wallet she attacked my leg and bit it. The man and some other people were laughing, and some were panicking too, but no one ventured to help me.
After a long fight I finally had my wallet back and we went home, but for a long time I could hear the monkey aggressively screaming at after me!
P.S:) Don't take this story seriously. I really had a lot of fun (writing it) :)
Wow!! This was a wonderful essay, for more than one reason. Some sentences were perfect and others required minor updates; I included a couple of suggestions. Your story was written in good order, imaginative and entertaining. Congratulations!
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No, I didn't :) I don't think his intention was bad, like to rob people and so on, because there were too many witnesses, so even if the monkey had stolen anything, he would have had to give it back :)
Maybe he just has bad sence of humor:)
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But did u finally find out what the man really wanted? what was his intention? :D
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The monkey
I want to tell you a story that happened to me last year.
It was late autumn. My friends and I went for a walk and saw a poster about an exhibition of monkeys in our town. I'm fond of monkeys, you know, they are such cute and clever animals!:)
So we bought tickets without any hesitation.
Later that day we visited the exhibition. There were a lot of monkeys: some of them were in glass terrariums or in cages, some were sitting on leashes and the other who were smarter and calmer were free to do whatever they wanted. We moved from cage to cage admiring those cute animals. I was so touched that even shed a tear, I was sorry that such cute animals had to be locked in cages.
Then we came up to a man, who had a small nimble and restless monkey on a leash. The monkey was jumping on people, on their shoulders, getting into their bags, pockets and stealing things from there. I had a wallet in my hand and the man who hold the leash asked me to give my wallet to that little beast. I didn't want to do it, because there was a big sum of money in that wallet. But the man assured, that it would be fun and that the monkey wouldn't steal or harm anything. Nevertheless I didn't agree, but the man came up to me, literally snatched the wallet from my hands and gave it to the monkey. She immediately opened and got some banknotes out of it. I panicked and tried to get my wallet back, but the monkey became so angry, she started screaming shrilly, and after my another attempt to take my wallet she attacked my leg and bit it. The man and some other people were laughing and some were panicking too but none ventured to help me.
After a long fight I finally had my wallet back and we went home but for a long time I could hear the monkey agressively screaming after me!
P.S:) Don't take this story seriously, I really had a lot of fun:)
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