9/12/2014 Diary of a Pirate

Diary of Pirate Captain Hovay 

Today one [1]new member, Diego, signed up as our new crew member. [2]The probation period is one month. It is just in time that we are short of a cook. The previous cook was draunk and accidentally fallenell into the sea. This is quite common asnd part and parcel of the life of a pirate.

Our ship survived fromthe rough sea in the previous night,. tThe ship is in bad shape and needs to be repaired badly.

Today, we are going to stop at a nearby port and refurnish some food supplies. At the same time, we will repair the ship.

I intend to buy a parrot to look more like a professional pirate captaion and this canwill give my crews more confidence.

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What a fun diary entry!

[1] Since you say Diego signed up, we know he's a new member, so maybe you could describe his character where I highlighted. Your description could give the reader a clue why he would sign up to a pirate crew. For example, "Today, a scoundral who is quick with a knife, Diego, signed onto our crew."

[2] As a reader, I'm unclear why I need to know that the probationary period is one month, when you follow that by saying "in that time we are short a cook." Is Diego the new cook? Will he become the new cook after the probationary period?