Dear Mr Webster:

Thank you for writing to me. I am sure that my students will do their best in Manchester. I look forward to their English levels improving significantly. This is important; now more than ever, because of the globalized world we live in.

Regarding accommodations; it will be better to stay with local families. Not only because of the prize, but  because the students will be able to know people better. Would you please inform me of the fees for both types of accommodations? 

Taking into account that most students are below the age of sixteen, they should tour the countryside or a theme park. In addition; what type of clothing should we bring? 

I look forward to your prompt reply.

Sincerely, 

María López

Let´s try with a FCE formal letter!

Dear Mr Webster

Thanks for writing to me. I am pretty sure my students will do their best in Manchester. I really look forward their English level improving in a really significant way. Nowadays this is more important than ever because of the globalized world that we live in.

Regarding to the accommodations, what I feel is that it would be better [for whom?] to stay with local families not only because of the prize [?] but also due to the fact that /because students will be able to meet local people in a closer way. I wonder if you would mind telling me/if you could tell me first of all (in advance) what the fees of for both kinds of accommodation are.

Taking into account that most students are below under the age of sixteen, I would not mind going either to the countryside or to a theme park. Added to this Additionally, I would also ask would like to know what type of clothes should we bring.

I look forward to receiving your reply.

Yours faithfully.

María López