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Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing with regard because I am looking for accommodation for my tow two-month stay ing in London, starting next month.
I am a high school student from Beijing, China, and my name is Mike Wang. Because I applied for a training course in London University three months ago, I will take start it in August. I noticed from the Internet that your agency is close to the university where I am going to take my course [1], so I wish hope you can recommend an apartment for me. Because I am longing for to practise my English, I hope I can stay with some natives locals so that I can communicate with them in English. A room with a bed and a desk is the basic requirement, and there should be a Wi-Fi connection because I will talk to my parents everyday on s Skype. The P price should be around £ 500 per month and it will be better if it is lower.
I will arrive in London on August 11. I am looking forward to hearing from you as soon as possible.
Yours sincerely,
Mike Wang
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[1] Here is the corrected version of two sentences:
Because I applied for a training course in London University three months ago, I will start it in August. I noticed from the Internet that your agency is close to the university where I am going to take my course.
Because the first sentence identifies the university and states that you will be taking a course there, you don't need to repeat this information in the second sentence. Therefore, we can further edit your letter as follows:
Because I applied for a training course in London University three months ago, I will start it in August. I noticed from the Internet that your agency is close to the university where I am going to take my course.
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