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Sports and other things I have always read that sport was one of the most important inventions that the Ancient Greeks transmitted to western societies. If we think just a minute about what represents sport today I am sure that we would say things as: beauty, wealth, youth, competitivity and so on. We can see all of these things in competitions like Olympic Games that was an modern invention inspired in the Greek's legacy. But I want to pay attention on the values. Nowadays sport is not only a competition where two teams or sportsmen fight to achieve a title or medal. Sports show what is the mentality of our society. If the most popular sportsman is a young person is why we think that youth is a fundamental skill to triumph in life. On the other hand, if an sportsman or sportswoman is beautiful, he or she will have more posibilities to triumph. The conclusion could be that all of us believe that beauty or youth are two elements to be a winner not only in sport but in any place. Although there is an interesting thing related with sport that the Ancient Greeks passed to us: if you care you body you will care your mind (less food and more exercise).

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Sports and other things

I have always read that sport was one of the most important inventions that the Ancient Greeks transmitted to western societies. If we think just a minute about what represents sport today I am sure that we would say things such as: beauty, wealth, youth, competitivity and so on. We can see all of these things in competitions like the Olympic Games that was an modern invention inspired in the Greek's Greeks' legacy.

But I want to pay attention on to the values. Nowadays sport is not only a competition where two teams or sportsmen fight to achieve a title or medal. Sports show what is the mentality of our society. If the most popular sportsman is a young person, that is why we think that youth is a fundamental skill to triumph in life. On the other hand, if an sportsman or sportswoman is beautiful, he or she will have more posibilities to triumph. The conclusion could be that all of us believe that beauty or youth are two elements to be a winner not only in sport but in any place.
Although there is an interesting thing related with to sport that the Ancient Greeks passed to us: if you care for you body you will care for your mind (less food and more exercise).

 

Ramon, this is very well written, I just added a few minor grammatical fixes and a few small changes to make it read more naturally.

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