Please correct my English.
I will take a test of English. So please correct my English.
Q.Read the e-mail below and Write an appropriate response to Kelly. Your response should be around 100 words in length.
Dear Kenichi,
How are you doing? I've just become engaged to Justin, my boyfriend. We are very excited. He's 26 years old, the same age as me.
The other day, I read an interesting magazine article that said Japanese people tend to get married at a later age these days. I'm interested in your opinion. Why do you think this is happening?
The article also said that many people in Japan use the Internet to meet their friends or future life partners. What do you think about this?
It makes me wonder if relationships in Japan are becoming more superficial these days. Do you think this is true?
I'm looking forwatd to hearing from you.
Kelly
My answer:
Dear Kelly,
Thank you for your message.
I'll answer your questions.
First, Japanese people tend to get married at a later age these days because they want to enjoy their freedom.
Second, it's good to use the Internet to meet friends or future life partners because we can find friends who match with us. Furthermore, we learn different cultures from them.
Third, we can make many friends on the Internet so we can't spend much time to each person. That's why relationships in Japan are becoming more superficial these days.
Take care.
Kenichi
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Please correct my English.
I will take a test of English. So please correct my English.Q.Read the e-mail below and Write an appropriate response to Kelly. Your response should be around 100 words in length.
Dear Kenichi,
How are you doing? I've just become engaged to Justin, my boyfriend. We are very excited. He's 26 years old, the same age as me.
The other day, I read an interesting magazine article that said Japanese people tend to get married at a later age these days. I'm interested in your opinion. Why do you think this is happening?
The article also said that many people in Japan use the Internet to meet their friends or future life partners. What do you think about this?
It makes me wonder if relationships in Japan are becoming more superficial these days. Do you think this is true?
I'm looking forwatd to hearing from you.
Kelly
My answer:
Dear Kelly,
Thank you for your message.
I'll answer your questions.
First, Japanese people tend to get married at a later age these days because they want to enjoy their freedom.
Second, it's good to use the Internet to meet friends or future life partners because we can find friends who match with us. Furthermore, we learn different cultures from them.
Third, we can make many friends on the Internet so we can't spend so much time interacting with each person. That's why relationships in Japan are becoming more superficial these days.
Take care.
Kenichi
Is that what you believe, are your relationships superficial? I liked "First, Japanese people tend to get married at a later age these days because they want to enjoy their freedom." and Second point but Third point not so much. I don't suggest that you are wrong but I believe a correct response is not just answering questions. Do you talk with your friends like that? Your friend told you she is engaged, that does not matter, you are not excited or angry or something about this?
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93 words though I could have miscounted.
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Great job! I can't find any errors. One comment is that the tone of both emails is very formal. It sounds like a business email, rather than a personal one between friends.
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