Happy birthday!
Today is my birthday, and it's the valentines day in China. And I'm so happy today!
In the afternoon I gone to see a movie with my brother, and then we gone to eat Korean BBQ, and drank some wine. Although I'm in drank, but I should write a diary. Birthday is happy to themselves, but it's the same time my mom suffered so much pain to bring me come to this world. So I should give thanks for my mom and dad. On the other way I should not celebrate with my friends, and making a call to my mom tell her 'I love you mom'.
So that's why I insisting on write this diary, I must making something for ever, and let me remember evertimes.
Damon.
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Happy birthday!
Today is my birthday, and it’s also Valentine’s day in China. I’m so happy today!
In the afternoon I went to see a movie with my brother, and then we ate some Korean barbecue and drank some wine. Although I’m drunk I will write a diary. People should be happy for themselves on their birthdays, but at the same time my mom suffered so much pain to bring me into this world. So I should give thanks to my mom and dad. On the other hand, I should not celebrate with my friends. I should call my mom to tell her, ‘I love you mom’. So that’s why I insist on writing this diary. I must make something forever, and let me remember it for all time.
Damon.
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Happy birthday!
Today is my birthday and it's Valentine's Day in China. I'm so happy today!
In the afternoon I went to see a movie with my brother and then we went to eat Korean BBQ and drank some wine. Although I'm drunk, I should write a diary. Birthdays are happy to others, but it's the same time my mom suffered so much pain to bring me into to this world. So I should give thanks for my mom and dad. On the other hand, I should (not? - do you mean should or should not?) celebrate with my friends and make a call to my mom to tell her 'I love you'.
So that's why I insist on writing this diary, I want to make something that will last forever and I want to remember it always.
Damon.
hope this helps, the meaning wasn't always clear but you did a really good job, you just made a few grammatical mistakes. Happy learning!
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Happy birthday!
Today is my birthday, and it's the valentines day in China. I'm so happy today!
In the afternoon I went to see a movie with my brother, then we ate Korean BBQ, and drank some wine. Although I'm drunk,I should write a diary. Birthday is happy to others, but it's the same time my mom suffered so much pain to bring me come to this world. So I should give thanks for my mom and dad. On the other way I should not celebrate with my friends, and make a call to my mom to tell her 'I love you mom'.
So that's why I insist on writing this diary, I must make something for ever, and let me remember evertimes.
Damon.
may my correction helpful for you
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