Summary of a story : Beginner's luck... I'll appreciate your corrections! :)

This story is about James Milner who lands in a job at his uncle's bank in London. He has no experience in working in banks, so his first day at work is was terrible. He was very nervous because he doesn’t knew what to do and can’t couldn't understand the orders that several men tell told him through on a telephone headset, or even less the things he had to do at on the computer. However, he lied and pretended to know about it. His only job was in a fast food restaurant in London where the only instructions he heard through the telephone headset were about food orders.
James had always been an average boy; he had always passed his exams and went to university where he studied economics and commerce. He comes came from a wealthy family and he had always felt the pressure of his father's expectations that had pushed him to have a great career and or job as businessman, an entrepreneur, an accountant or a politician, but he didn’t really care.
As time passed, James learned how to use the computer and how to do his new job that mostly consisted of buying and selling things. At work, he met Davy Peterson, his colleague who said beginner´s luck to him because of which he started to become a successful person. Then his boss buys bought a bottle of champagne to celebrate James’ great work on the Singapore bank. They drink all drank the champagne including Davy and then they go went to a bar and carry on continued drinking some more. James and Davy came back to the office to keep and kept on working, but James is was so happy and tired that he can’t see what he was doing and started typing anything in something on the computer. The next day he decided to take a holiday for a few days and to travel so he called to his boss to get permission. He travelled to Thailand and relaxed. Two days later, he goes went to a bar into a small town and buy bought the newspaper to and read an article about the bank where he worked, he heard some people talking about that bank that collapsed because somebody had made lots of mistakes, then he realized that he was the guilty. Immediately, he goes went to a cash machine to take out all his money and came back to the bar to ask for a job as a barman. He said he has experience because he worked in a fast food restaurant in London. The owner of the bar offered him the job. Finally James changed his name to Fernando so that he would not be recognized.

Well written one. Just make sure you follow only one tense through out the naration. If you jump from Present to Past then the gist of the narration will be lost.

Good work. Keep it up.All the best