one day,feel free to correct my mistake! ：）
GOD! The weather forecast told me that it will rain today!
I wake up
open the window! look far through the window!
actually it's not raining! however, I wish it's raining today cause it's too hot these days in ShangHai!
I TURN on the air condition, pick up my Guitar. practise the sony "say something" by a big great big world.
I am so love this song, just quite and full of emotion!
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One Day
(feel free to correct my mistakes!) ：）
GOD! The weather forecast told me that it would rain today!
I woke up, opened the window, and looked far through the window.
Actually, it wasn't raining. However, I wish it were raining today because it's too hot these days in ShangHai! I turned on the air conditioner, picked up my guitar and practiced the song "Say Something" by A Great Big World. I am so in love with this song, just full of emotion!
Some notes:
1. Only use "!" when necessary (it sounds sort of like you're yelling everything).
2. Always capitalize the first letter of a sentence and names (like the name of a song or band).
3. "full of emotion" is correct. "full of emotions" is unnatural here.
4. Since this is a story about what happened earlier today, you should use past tense verbs.
Keep up the good work! I also really like the song "Say Something". :)
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one day,feel free to correct my mistake!
Oh god! The weather forecast showed that it would rain today!
I woke up
open the window! looked far through the window,
it was not raining! however, I wish it was, because it's too hot these days in Shanghai!
I turned on the air condition, picked up my Guitar, and practised the song "say something" by (a great big world) I love this song so much, calm and full of emotions!
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One day(feel free to correct my mistake! ：）
God! The weather forecast told me that it would rain today!
I waked up and opened the window,I looked far through the window. Actually it was not raining! However, I wished it would rain today because it's too hot these days in ShangHai!
I turned on the air condition, picked up my guitar and practise the song "say something" by a big great big world(What does this sentense mean?).
I love this song so much, just quite and full of emotions!
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1)I think if you are telling a story or discribing some thing you should use the past like ( I woke up and opened ___ not i wake up and open ) and all the other verbs .
2) because not cause .
3) song not sony .
4) no thing in English called ( i am so love ) :D ------------- you ca write ( i love this song this so much).
5) full of emotions not emotion (plural i mean )
but nice keep on writing English :D it will help you
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