Introduction

it's This is my already 6th Post. It is late for to introdouce myself. introducing me.
Hello, my name is Bella and I live . living in South Korea. My female colleagues office workers and I personally enjoyed doing the exercises.
This year in particular, I hope expect to start a new hobby. It is not easy but I'll try to do. Our company give all employees a 2 weeks vacation. I couldn't decide what to do yet. so these days, I'm busy with holiday planning now. What is your summer vacation plan?

Introduction

it's already 6th Post. it is late for introducing me. -> It's already my 6th post. This is a late introduction. 

Hello, my name is bella. -> Good. 

living in south korea. -> I live in South Korea. 

female office workers and i personally enjoyed the exercise. -> I'm a female office worker and I like to exercise. 

this year in particular, i expect to start a new hobby. -> This year I think I'll start a new hobby. 

it is not easy i'll try to do. -> It won't be easy, but I'm going to try anyway. 

our company give all employee 2 weeks vacation. -> My company gives all employees two weeks of vacation. 

i couldn't decide yet. -> I haven't decided what I'm going to do on my vacation yet. 

so these days, i'm busy with holiday planning. > Good. 

what is your summer vacation plan? -> Good. 

Hey Bella, 

Nice writing but make sure to use capital letters when needed. I highlighted some of your mistakes in yellow and rewrote some of your problematic sentences in a way I would write them.